Gone
A Story Every Day in 2024 Sept 21st 265/366
She fell, tumbling down the scree of the quarry like a rag doll. Except rag dolls don't scream and go silent suddenly and they don't thud or crack, or sink when they hit water.
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Laney had been outfoxing them, her swiftness beating them every time. Frustration was starting to show for the boys. Luke wanted to go but he knew his friends, especially Mark. He wouldn't be happy until Laney lost. And they were getting closer to catching her with each renewed foray, to within a whisker.
Luke had never seen her laugh so hard.
*
"Laney?"
Mark and Matt were at the edge of the quarry, looking down. They were still. Staring. Luke was puffing. He'd tried to keep up and had dived for Laney when she'd come close but he was tired and had felt himself flagging. He came over to where his friends stood and looked.
Had she hurt herself? Where was she? There was no sign of her, the only movement being the wind stirring the grasses and weeds sprouting through the stones, and the small splashes at the water's edge.
"Where's Laney?" Luke said, but Mark and Matt remained quiet. "Where's she gone?"
Mark was white, his eyes moist and his bottom lip was trembling. Luke remembered thinking "Mark never cries" and wanting to say something to taunt but in his gut, he knew that there was a reason, a very good reason because of its strangeness.
"Is she hiding?"
It was Matt that broke the silence, turning to look at Luke, anger on his face.
"Shut up, Luke," he said, growling at his friend.
Luke flinched at his friend's aggression and then saw that Matt had tears in his eyes too. He didn't get it. He could see something was wrong but what? He wished one of them would just tell him.
"She's gone," Matt said.
"Why? Why did she go? Was it because we almost got her?"
Matt shook his head. "God, you're stupid, Luke."
Luke shrank back again and looked to Mark for support but he was still just staring, down at the water, down into its depths and suddenly, Luke knew, knew exactly where Laney had gone.
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365 words
A continuation of those that have gone before although they all stand alone, just like the boys at the edge of that quarry.
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Comments (16)
Mark being seen as someone who never cries, to Luke’s slow realisation, then to even say at the end, that he finally realised where laney had gone… 😟 I don’t know what to do with myself. I can’t feel anything but empathy for them, even though I really don’t want to feel this way. I want to be neutral darn it! 👌🏽👏🏽♥️
This is the piece that introduced me to the series. So dark and sad without being graphic.
You can just feel the innocence of those boys die along with Laney. In the blink of an eye, their childhood is shattered.
😢 A sad part. Interesting structure regarding a mini prologue at beginning. 👏
So tragic and believable.
Heartcrushing...but such a good meditiation on how tragedy can trike and have a devestating effect on even the happiest of times. Master storyteller, chum, that is you. Off to read the next part!
Poor Luke. As heartbreaking as this tale is you’re exploring of it has been incredibly well done!
Literally heartbreaking.
Well.... now we know what happened.... Somehow, it's just a bad as I imagined. Maybe worse. 😳
I felt the trauma and the regret....well done, Rachel!
Oh FUCK! This one pummels in all the ouchy places 🤯 101 days to go! How's that feel??
Oh my, every re-telling of this story gives something else for my heart to cry about. Beautifully done, Rachel.
Ah, darn. I knew it was coming, but still.
Blimey. Poor Laney! I love the picture you chose to accompany it. It gives me the creeps. I wonder how the kids with handle it?
Sometimes I'm as stupid as Luke 😅😅
You’ve captured so very well the raw emotion, anxiousness, and prevailing shock at what’s happened. Well done.