Your Desertion
My Grief
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Shoulders bowing under the weight of your absence
It’s not words I miss, it’s yours
Love me, then lose me, then leave me
Earth is shaking under my fingertips, quaking under my grief
Now I take myself apart like an instrument
Curse myself for caring
Every silence is just a reminder of your desertion
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Poppy
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Comments (23)
Trying to learn about acrostic poetry. This is sad and heartbreaking. Well deserved placement. Beautifully written. - Well Done!!!
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Masterfully heartbreaking - really gorgeous, feeling work here. Congratulations on the well-deserved placing, Poppy!
Dang, Poppy, this is beautifully and heartbreakingly written. Well done, and such a deserving winner! Congratulations!
Beautifully written. Congratulations! 🎉
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Beautifully sad. Well done. 💖
Yay!🥳 Congratulations on your well deserved placing in the challenge 🤩💖
Back to say congrats on runner up!
Yay Poppy!! Congrats on Runner Up!!!
Brilliant!!! Congratulations on the runner up win!!!❤️❤️💕
A beautifully written poem, congrats on the runner-up placing!
This is so heartbreakingly lovely - you've captured the essence of loneliness and grief. Congratulations on placing as a runner up with this piece - it's well-deserved.
Heartfelt, and heartbreak:/ “Love me, then lose me, then leave me” is such an impactful line Poppy, and this will be relatable to a lot of readers I’m sure!
beautifully tragic
This is one of those poems that are so good I didn’t realize it was an acrostic until I read it again. Very well done, Poppy
One of the most uncomfortable silences there is... 💔
Brilliant Silence acrostic! My favourite line is: “Love me, then lose me, then leave me” Alliteration always affects me!😊
Beautifully heartbreaking.
"It’s not words I miss, it’s yours" - such a simple line but so weighted.
Heartbreaking 💔 very well written 👏
Great but sad words, my last one went in the opposite direstion
I forgot this was an acrostic, got immersed.