Demons taunting cries
Upon bloody feet now tread
We the dead to hell
About the Creator
JBaz
I have enjoyed writing for most of my life, never professionally.
I wish to now share my stories with others, lets see where it goes.
Born and raised on the Canadian Prairies, I currently reside on the West Coast. I call both places home.
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Comments (25)
That final line lands hard. The collective we makes the horror feel inescapable.
Congratulations on your top story!🎉🎉🎉
Congratulations 🎊 👏 Well deserve Top Story! You were born to be a Writer, Jason!
Fabulous writing Jason!
Sounds like some "hot kicks" (feet)! 😅 Congrats on Top Story Jason!!
The contrast of delicate haiku form with such brutal imagery makes it even more unsettling. A perfect fusion of beauty and terror.
The imagery is visceral and haunting, that descent into darkness so powerfully compressed. You've really mastered the art of saying so much with so little. Excellent haiku! And congrats on winning the Top Story! ('m catching up on everyone's posts today after being away for four days.)
Oooh, but I really like your haunting haiku. It wreaks of Shakespeare's beauty. Well done & congratulations on the Top Story, too.
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Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Reminds me of something Jhonen Vasquez would write! Cool
Astonishing, Jason! Dark and shiveringly dreadful. Did not realize it was even possible to get a Top Story for a Haiku till this instant! Well done and good luck on the challenge!
Annnnd back to say congrats my friend
This is a sick haiku! You've nailed the horror aspect.
Oooo, this was so dark and delicious! I devoured it hehehehehe!
What a bleak reality that would be (Is/ Was). Who knows what really goes on down there. One thing for sure, it's hot as hell, lol. Nice one, J!
Oh my gosh, this looks like a nightmare. Was exactly what I said when I saw this photo. Now I am scared to scroll down to your words. You definitely made sure we are as uncomfortable as possible. The demons taunting cries. All I can hear. Then bloody feet. So literally bleeding on our walk to hell. Gosh this is not a position I would like to be in. Not only am I dead, but I also didn't make it to paradise. It's too much to bear. Fantastic horror haiku JBaz 👌🏾👏🏾🤗❤️
The final walk is terrifying. Truly a horror haiku.
There's such a rhythm to this as I read it, it makes it even more eerie. Great one!
Pretty horrifying, Jason!
Darkly delightful. Such imagery created with so few words. Excellent job, Jason.
Great job on this haiku. My favorite line is "Upon bloody feet now tread". It's not exactly gruesome, but it is bloody enough to be disturbing. The image goes perfectly with it as well. Nicely done.
Great image to go with this one
I love this haiku, Jason, and agree with Dana 100%❣
Great job, JB! I don't know if it was intentional, but I think the rhyme in feet now tread/we the dead adds a lot to the way this reads.