Plan
This is for the Vocal "Micro Heist" Challenge: The Prompt Write a microfiction story about a heist in exactly 200 words.
Plan
The Heist was planned to the last detail.
The only thing that they were missing was the combination to the big cellar safe which contained the gold bars.
The owners were away, but due back tomorrow.
Then they got a phone call from an unknown number telling them that they could have the numbers they needed but had to leave a hundred pounds in an envelope in the toilets at the local pub.
That was cheap for what they were going to get although they didn't know who had given them the numbers.
They got to the house and were surprised that the back door was not locked, They went down to the cellar and moved a cupboard to reveal the cellar safe door.
They turned the combination and when the final number was dialled the door opened revealing a large empty room. A light came and they entered thinking the gold bars must be in some side cupboards.
The door slammed shut.
Then it started to get hot, very hot. Their skin started to blister.
Outside The Door
Two figures were increasing the heating controls on their safe-cum-cooker.
"Looks like it will be longpig for lunch again darling"
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Comments (7)
Gross. In a good way π Thatβs a pretty dope twist, Mike.
Lol, that ending was so unexpected! I loved it!
very creative ending
Okay, I definitely didn't see that ending coming! This was straight to the point and easy to understand. Though, I think you meant due instead of die when you said 'die back tomorrow.' Keep up the good work!
Wow! Great story, and nice plot twist.
What an ending line! I started laughing out of disbelief when I got to the end! I was not expecting that twist at all! Awesome job on this story!
Yes, great twist. I think these short challenges are begging for a good twist.