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"The Fan" Gets Another Chance.... Honorable Mention in Self-Editing Epiphany Challenge.
Here is the original poem: There are some Challenges where I feel that the Vocal Gods are smiling down on me. There is work that I have produced that has brought out the best in me; sometimes it has brought out things I did not know existed in me. And I feel that I really do have something to say with this one.
By Kendall Defoe 10 months ago in Critique
Easter baskets
Who remembers way back when on Easter morning going throughout the house hunting for a basket full of all sorts of treats. My childhood Easter baskets were full of foiled eggs and jellybeans alongside a chocolate bunny and a white chocolate cross. There was also assorted candies as well as hard-boiled colored eggs. Well, here is another memory. Who remembers dying those Easter eggs the night before or even a few days earlier? There was a brand called Paas that does still exist today. I remember seeing the tablets dissolve and couldn't wait to dunk an egg or two, and usually getting my fingers dyed too.
By Mark Graham10 months ago in Critique
What goes through the mind of an empty envelope?
Humans! Aah, the notorious ones gospelled with the prowess of pouring their hearts onto the folds of power, of unleashing the confinement of unsaid pain through the enigmatic flair of woven syllables through the crevices of their glistening minds.
By Hridya Sharma10 months ago in Critique
"Behind the Scenes of 'Marty Supreme': A Deep Dive into the Film"
Unveiling Marty Supreme: A Deep Dive into the Upcoming Cinematic Sensation A New Sports Drama Set to Make Waves In the ever-evolving landscape of cinema, certain films emerge that captivate audiences and critics alike, sparking conversations and anticipation. One such film on the horizon is Marty Supreme, a sports drama set to release on December 25, 2025. With its unique storyline, stellar cast, and visionary direction, this film promises to offer a fresh perspective on the world of table tennis, intertwining complex character dynamics with a rich narrative.
By PRABAL TR PRO10 months ago in Critique
beginning-endings. Runner-Up in Self-Editing Epiphany Challenge. Top Story - March 2025.
The following is an excerpt of a draft of the opening of a novel which I hope to someday write. This piece is being submitted for Vocal's "Self-Editing Epiphany" Challenge, and will therefore include my analysis and reflections following the conclusion of the excerpt. Cheers, friends!
By Gabriel Huizenga10 months ago in Critique
You Turned the Page, Didn’t You?
Introduction In the novel I’m writing, boundaries are porous. The Reader is not a passive observer, but a participant. The story doesn’t merely unfold; it listens, responds, and questions its own existence. At key moments, I employ what I call Meetings of the Minds—conversations between characters, but also with the Reader, whose voice becomes entangled in the exchange.
By Stéphane Lallée10 months ago in Critique
My own worst Art Critique
I have to be honest—- Critique is one of the most challenges that I have to try to keep tackle it. For years, I have always been my own worst credit or worst critique- no matter what creativity I was doing especially during my school life and even after graduation. I also couldn’t go to the art school or art college at all— it was quite expensive and other reasons (its very complicated to share). I thought I wasn’t going to be succeed anything due from my mental health, my conditions—my learning issues, mixed language disorder, and mixed development delayed since childhood. I always like making stories like imagination and be creative as an illustrator(my dream career), same thing when I want to be an artist. I have also been struggled if I am talented enough or not even quite at all…
By Meghan LeVaughn 10 months ago in Critique
Writing on Medium
A few years ago, before I started reading and writing on Vocal.com I was, and still have an account on Medium.com even though I haven't written there very much since writing here. On that site I posted very short works and writing ideas, and if I remember there is also some of my artwork. To be honest I did receive some views for my work, but not many. After several months to almost a year I started to write for other sites for there was one named personapaper.com based out of England now. It was a paying site till the owners decided to sell or would another word be better like sellout. It was a fun site to write for though.
By Mark Graham10 months ago in Critique
Are Ukrainians prepared for concessions and a ceasefire? What the polls say is as follows:
The idea of a negotiated end to the three-year war has been put on the agenda and in the hands of Russian President Vladimir Putin thanks to an agreement between the United States and Ukraine on a ceasefire proposal. However, the parties' positions are pretty clear even before Moscow responds.
By Md Mirajul Islam10 months ago in Critique
Trump’s Tariffs on Steel and Aluminum Go Into Effect
President Trump’s sweeping tariffs on foreign steel and aluminum went into effect on Wednesday, escalating America’s trade spats with global competitors, including close allies already reeling from his on-and-off approach to trade penalties.
By Md Mirajul Islam10 months ago in Critique
A Week of Spring cleaning
For the past two and a half weeks I have been spring cleaning three houses. My nephew's, my niece's and my sister's. This past week instead of reading and writing here on Vocal I spring cleaned my sister's house. I washed down the walls, washed the windows, laundered curtains, too, polished the furniture and mopped the floors.
By Mark Graham10 months ago in Critique
