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Self-Edit With no time to backtrack, Paul improvised and reached for his phone in his back pocket. He set up the phone to record live as he looked around the kitchen. He pointed the phone towards the glass in the sink and then went down to the floor at the trail of footprints he followed into the kitchen. He then looked through the phone screen as he did a 360 view of the cabinets, appliances, and ceiling. There were no more footprints in this thoroughly cleaned kitchen. How could the muddy footprints enter the room and not exit? The person must have realized the mess they were leaving behind and removed their shoes. Why not clean up the shoe prints already left behind? A maladroit way to clean up after yourself so you don’t get caught. Thank you for helping us.
By Angie Johnson9 months ago in Critique
More Gross Jokes
'More Gross Jokes' written by Buck Jones is an old joke book for kids who have a weird sense of funny. The jokes range in topic from sick and twisted to Rib Ticklers to Fang-tastically Funny and more like that throughout the book. 'What's a Dentist's favorite ride? A molar-coaster.
By Mark Graham10 months ago in Critique
The Poison Season
'The Poison Season' is a teen or even an adult romance novel written by Maria Rutherford. It is all about family and friends living on the island of Endla that is protected by magic and a wandering forest. It is also surrounded by a poisoned lake. The main characters of Leelo and her cousin Sage are known as watchers for the Endlans believe that the citizens on the mainland are their enemies. The island is self-sustaining as long as the inhabitants give sacrifices to the forest. If any Endlan does not show some sort of magic they are incantu (this means the person does not have magic) and must be banished. Music and singing are the ways that magic is done in most cases on Endla Tate seems not to have magic and Leelo keeps hoping right to the last minute that Tate exhibits something.
By Mark Graham10 months ago in Critique
Washington!
Washington! The Civil War is over and now veterans must figure a way to make a living and now back two famous families start their own business, but there is also a new mission and that is to seek more land in the Montana territory and increase westward expansion now.
By Mark Graham10 months ago in Critique
Nevada!
Nevada! this is the story with the Civil War mounting and one of the founding leaders of the original wagon train makes one last wagon train trip to help the Union secure something very precious and much needed at this time in history. Will they succeed or fail this mission?
By Mark Graham10 months ago in Critique
Colorado!
Months ago I started sharing book blurbs on various series of books here is one on Dana Fuller Ross's Wagons West story 'Colorado!'. This is a continuation of what started in Independence and now on the brink of Civil War will Colorado be Union or Confederate territory. War is hell!
By Mark Graham10 months ago in Critique
Earth's Children 2
Book two of 'Earth's Children series' entitled 'The Valley of Horses' picks up with Ayla all alone for she has been exiled from the Clan. Ayla learns that she has many talents that seem to let her make 'friends' with pretty much all of nature its flora and fauna. Ayla likes living and learning what is around her, but she is also lonely. This is also the story of Jondalar on his journey of growing up and while on this journey with his brother there are choices that need to be made for all, and relationships are made for both.
By Mark Graham10 months ago in Critique
Earth's Children
There is a series of novels out there written by Jean M. Auel known as 'Earth's Children'. The first in the series is entitled 'The Clan and The Cave Bear' that starts out with a five-year-old child named Ayla, who lost her parents during an earthquake. Ayla is found by a clan of cavepeople who are not like her for she is one of the 'Others'. Ayla grows up and becomes in a way one of them even though she is different she still loves the clan for the most part. The first of novels set during the prehistoric eras.
By Mark Graham10 months ago in Critique
Charlotte's Web
Just finished re-reading 'Charlotte's Web' by E.B. White for the umpteenth time, and for me it shows me many lessons that we all need to learn and remember. Actually, it is the story of the facts of life from birth to death to dealing with other societal issues like dealing with family relationships like Fern does when saving the 'runt' as well as just plain growing up issues, and learning how to accept what happens to all involved in living life and making various kinds of friendships and still learning that there is a higher power to live our lives.
By Mark Graham10 months ago in Critique
Adrishyam Season 2 (2025) Review: Eijaz Khan Looks More Dangerous Than Ever
Along with web series in OTT, another quite famous term is web serial. Many web serials have come on JioHotstar, have come on the SonyLIV platform, MX Player also brought its web serial, now a web serial which was very popular on the SonyLIV platform is Adrishyam, whose Season 2 has come, so how is that, let's talk about it.
By Ayush Verma10 months ago in Critique
Jurassic World: Chaos Theory Season 3 Review – Best Season Yet?
There is very good news for Jurassic series fans because finally, I have watched Season 3 of Jurassic World: Chaos Theory. For those who don't know, let me tell them that this is an animated series that is connected to our main Jurassic movie.
By Ayush Verma10 months ago in Critique
