Art
Libraries
Book upon books Circulation desk info knowledge abounds. (Who doesn't like or even loves going to a library. Line one, of course, all the books that one can and even desire. Line two the place where one learns where to get said desired book. Line three the knowledge that a reader receives from said books that was desired.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
doorways
open and close a way to come and go in and out of here. (Here is another haiku for doorways to our souls and lives. The first line is fine for they do work in this way. That brings us to the second line that seemed that way to go. The third line is what we do when we approach a doorway to here, there, and everywhere.) Comments are truly appreciated.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Sunday Morning
An open window a light from above for peace, love, joy. (Trying to describe a Sunday morning. The first line I originally started with 'A open window' but grammar check in its' way said no. The second line to me is right. The third line a reason for a Sunday morning is okay. Please comment and learning a lot.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Jams and Jellies
Homemade goodness here abounding love of flavors sweet and sour goodness. (One more for the road that I believe will be having many people canning their own jams and jellies who knows. I believe I am getting better at this form of poetry, so please share your thoughts that are appreciated.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Jelly Doughnuts
Sugary goodness flavors abound here Go ahead. Enjoy! (Here is another one for when looking for images I saw this one that gave me the idea for this haiku. The syllable count is correct, and I hope you all can enjoy this one and not gain an ounce. Please comment.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Another Door
A gray door that says "Open me." What is there here for all to see there? (I believe that I am getting the hang of writing haikus. Also, I think I got the syllable count for the whole haiku as well as each of lines. Please read and comment for it is really appreciated.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Doors
A garden door opens to a garden of friends that grow up and down. (Here is another haiku about a particular door to a secret garden. I believe that I have the syllable count right for this one. Hope you like this one and please comment after you read this one.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Babies
Full of wandering Plenty of hugs abound with Babies are family. (Here is another haiku. Again, I feel that maybe the word 'hugs' is either one or two syllables. 'Family' is two syllables to me. I divided 'fam/ily' like this making it two syllables or could be three 'fam/i/ly'. 'Wan/der/ing' like this giving three syllables. Please comment it will be greatly appreciated.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Thunderstorm
Dark clouds are brewing Winds at high speeds now howling Thunderstorms to engage. (One last haiku for tonight. I think they are getting a little better, I hope. My inspiration for this one was I was hearing thunder outside as well as the dark, gray clouds and sky. Please comment if you want to.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Rainbows
Rainbows of color all all red, yellow, orange, green, blue now after a rain. (I believe I described a basic rainbow. Also, I do believe I have the 5, 7, 5 pattern of a proper haiku. I had these ideas, and I wanted to get them down before they left me never to return. Hope you read and comment.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
