So the story goes
It is up to you to you dear reader. -JBaz out.
The red spiced tomato sauce bubbles, erupting like a volcano, out of control. Carl watches in slow motion as the crimson goo explodes upward, escaping the confines of the stainless steel pot. A tiny lava like drop lands on Carls bare forearm, blistering his skin and peeling it back like a banana. The pain is instant, and in his mind excruciating. However if a doctor were on hand his prognosis would be favorable, Carl would live.
Not that he feels like it at the moment, throwing the ladle aside, he quickly runs to pour cool water over the damaged appendage. Cursing loudly.
From the next room his wife, Jaylene calls. "Honey what's going on?"
"Burnt my freak'n arm on the sauce."
Jalene marched in, saw the "damage" then turned the stove off. Chuckling to herself.
Suddenly Carls posture changes.
The water continues running but Carls eyes remain fixated on what ever was on the other side of the window.
"Babe, what is it?" She asks.
Carl remains silent.
"Babe do you see something?"
Carl barely nods his head, still not saying a word. His eyes grow wide, the pain he once felt now vanishes completely.
"Carl, you're scaring me, what is it."
"Jaylene, grab the kids, we have to leave.... now."
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‘Jason.’ You’re saying. ‘What is this, part one or just an open short?’
First off, I apologize for not being active on Vocal lately. I am trying to read many of your works but my cell coverage and internet is spotty at best, and will be until the end of February.
Anyway back to what I was saying. I am sitting on the beach in Lapenita Mexico and this popped in my head. Not necessarily the wording but the thought of how to end a paragraph or to be exact a scene. No matter where you go a writers brain does not turn completely off.
This is not an unofficial challenge, but an exercise in writing.
Guidelines:
This will remain Active until March 5th (Again not a solid date, if you see this after and wish to try it please do).
-Your task, should you accept it, is to continue this story adding 500-1000 words, give or take.
-Must include one picture of the scene at the beginning or end, to go with your story.
- Must end on a cliff hanger, another open ending scene.
WHY: Because I will choose one or two works and continue the story.
Ask yourself what is happening:
- A fire in the neighbourhood
-A storm
-Perhaps Alien invasion
- Mayhap he is an Alien
-Does he have a secret and he is now found out.
-Is he the good guy or bad guy. Maybe he is an innocent man wrong place wrong time.
- Your imagination is the only real guideline that matters.
My only ask is that you drop it in this link so I can find it, otherwise it may get lost in the mix. I truly wish to read everyone’s story.
Good luck dear writers.
Jason
About the Creator
JBaz
I have enjoyed writing for most of my life, never professionally.
I wish to now share my stories with others, lets see where it goes.
Born and raised on the Canadian Prairies, I currently reside on the West Coast. I call both places home.




Comments (46)
Oooh sad I missed this!
Interesting exercise and...excellent story. Congratulations on Ts.
I have not been on much, lots happening. So i did nor see this, sounds fun and sorry I missed it. Giving them a read though. Yeah, TS.
Oh, I've missed this! Very cool!
I love the descriptions in this story! Like the erupting volcano lava! Also congrats on top story!
I saw this after the due date but will just give it a try! A cool write, JBaz!
I’ve just bought a stainless steel pot, and I am in love. Weird timing to read about it in this story. Ewe blistered skin and peeled back like a banana. I like how vivid and gross this was. Leave? Why? Oh my, what’s going on… 👀 I get that. My brain does not turn off. I am suppose to be going somewhere tomorrow and I already have my power bank incase my phone dies, and I need to write lol. Would be a literal crisis. Noooo I need more. But I realise this is a writing exercise. Hope you had a lovely time in Lapenita Mexico. I will sit this one out though. But I am going to try to read some of these, the prompt made me excited to see what people come up with, especially since it’s all going to end on a cliffhanger. 👌🏽
https://shopping-feedback.today/fiction/view-from-the-other-side%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E Here is my contribution. Hope it's in time.
Here's another entry, burning hot and fresh off the press... 🔥🔥🔥 https://shopping-feedback.today/fiction/father-of-the-sun%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Congrats 👏 https://shopping-feedback.today/writers/february-top-10-reads-list-for-vocal%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Here is my contribution: https://shopping-feedback.today/fiction/the-story-continues-responding-to-j-baz%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E I don't write much fiction so the opportunity was a nice chance to practice.
Of course I had to try this exercise. It was too tempting to not think about where it could go. Thank you for that. https://shopping-feedback.today/fiction/ethereal-witness%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Jason, I just found your challenge by seeing Lamar's entry. As you know, I haven't been around much lately. If I get a chance, I will give it a try. My kind of story!
I loved this , keep up the good work!
Fabulous ✍️⭐️🍀✍️
Awesome idea, JBaz! ☺️🫶
What a fun unofficial challenge!! This is awesome. Thanks for starting this, JBaz!
Since you haven't commented on mine as of yet, I'm guessing you haven't noticed it down below in the comment to my comment, so here it is again: https://shopping-feedback.today/writers/so-the-story-goes-wrz5x0djj%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Ok, I decided to give this a shot, here's my attempt https://shopping-feedback.today/stories/so-the-story-goes-on%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
So, I did a thing for your thing. Hope you like it - https://shopping-feedback.today/fiction/so-the-story-goes-a-flash-in-the-dark-582g5035j%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
This is such an awesome idea. I will put my thinking cap on and see what I may be able to contribute. Congratulations on your top story! 👏👏👏
Wooohooooo congratulations on your Leaderboard placement! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Yay Jason, congrats on second most popular story this week!!
Love this concept. Congratulations on Too Story and the Leadership Board. Richly deserved.
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊