If I told you your eyes light the crescent moon,
if I said that your voice makes the nightingale swoon,
if I swore that your smile warms the new day,
and insisted your arms keep the night chills away;
if I said, with your hands, you could make the world turn,
or that one kiss from you, and volcanoes would churn,
if I told you your passion causes oceans to rise,
and that when you are sad, I watch the sky cry;
if I said that the heavens call out your name
that the planets are honoured to spin in your frame
would you still turn and walk away
would you still believe
there was nothing
left
to say?
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Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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Comments (35)
Wow you blew me away with this one. Soooooo good Cathy!
A very fitting poem with nightingale photos to match.
This poem is filled with amazing imagery. Loved it. Thanks for sharing.
"the planets are honoured to spin in your frame" - oh!
Just beautiful!!!
Your imagery is stunning – "eyes light the crescent moon," "voice makes the nightingale swoon," "arms keep the night chills away" – it's all so evocative. The ending is heartbreaking, though. That sense of despair and the fear of rejection is really powerful. Great job 👏🏽
Love the feeling and smootheness of this one Cathy!! Congrats on most popular story!!
Wooohooooo congratulations on your Leaderboard placement! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Love the diminishing line length structure of this, Cathy! Just beautifully done!
Beautiful, Cathy!
Oh, my heart. This is beautiful and heart-wrenching, Cathy, 💗
What a beautifully crafted piece! It flows like a gentle melody, each line painting vivid emotions. The imagery is celestial, and the vulnerability at the end tugs at the heart. Truly captivating!
Wow! Well-wrought! This reminds me of the best work of the greats, Cathy. Shelley or Keats or Frost or Dickinson or Poe couldn't have done better. This would also be a great poem to set to music.
❤️ So romantic!
This was absolutely romantic, Kathy. And like Dhar said, we deserve someone who has complete faith in us. This would make great song lyrics!
This is a beautiful and strikingly sad poem, Cathy. And like all of your poetry, masterfully written. I love Dharsheena's response. Of course, it does not address the response at the end of your poem to the love-struck words expressed to the lover who walks silently away. But it is a pleasant dream. Why is true intimacy so difficult, so threatening, so terrifying? Clearly, I don't have the answer, so I'm just asking.
Go gurl! This is absolutely gorgeous! 💕
I don't know, sounds too good to be true. If anyone said this to me, I'd be like "What do you want from me?" 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 Jokes aside, we all deserve someone who genuinely feels this way about us. Loved your poem!
Beautiful words and I love the picture you used
Once again you managed to hit all the right emotions
Swoon…. This was just beautiful!
nice love poem
Beautiful, Cathy ❤️
Aewsome nature poem!
Gorgeous nature poem!!! Love it!!!❤️❤️💕