Twisted...
Thoughts at 2am. (Poppy's prompt).
2am. Sleep eluded, demons now infringing
broken, fractured and fragmented dreams impinging
on deeply yearning wishes vaunted, never granted
twisted, gnarled, my sins exposed, ghostlike, haunted
easing me into delusions of jaded jagged pieces
down to the depths of adagio's reaches~``
slowly plodding into larghetto's leisurely lento
horrors wrought, maundering slowly out the window
walking where Jesus walked, humility my sharpened sword
remonstrating the crowd unto sweet retro echoing reward
temptations like a wild goat comes wildly yearning
heartbeat's tantalizing anger yielding its spurning
swirling dry dusty wilderness swallowing me whole
seeds of the devil's flowers reach hungrily for my soul
abominable lies gnawing at my guts
throat parched, seeing only vile evil in dust
serving up dry throated hacks
the spitting up of sins being punished, forty whacks
Like Jesus in the wild wilderness forty days and nights
Meandering slowly, lips cracked, vainly pondering dark or light
No seeds to give birth to flowers
Just the devil sucking the succulence as cowards glower
Absolution, salvation, forgiveness for my sins
Hands held aloft, hoping bit-by-bit, my soul wins!!
Twisted and gnarled are the roots of my supplications
Hoping deep down, angels see not my evil intentions!!
2am. Blessed sleep soothes the demons
Freeing the real and frightening daemons!!!!!!!
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Poppy's prompt.
About the Creator
Novel Allen
You can only become truly accomplished at something you love. (Maya Angelou). Genuine accomplishment is not about financial gain, but about dedicating oneself to activities that bring joy and fulfillment.
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Comments (28)
I love this. You are so incredibly talented, Novel!
This is a great Novel! It makes my approach to this prompt feel so juvenile. It truly moved me, thank you. Congratulations on Top Story you definitely deserve it.
What a wonderful top story. Congratulations
This isn’t just a poem, it’s a song. Congratulations on top story.
Phenomenal job my friend with lots of meaning ! Very many terrific lines but this stood out “seeds of the devil's flowers reach hungrily for my soul!” 😄👏
Congratulations on Top Story, this is very deep !!! 💕
Splendid work! Keep the momentum—congrats!
Your wordsmithing is truly professional. Powerful stuff
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
You always give me something enjoyable to read, Novel. Your poem has a great combination of Biblical references and inclusion of aspects of music. Congratulations on Top Story!
Absolutely awesome!!! Love it!!!❤️❤️💕 Congratulations on Top Story too!!!
Simply magnificent! Congrats on your TOP STORY!
Excellent! It begs to be performed (& I hope you do). Congrats on TS!
Excellent use of language. Congrats on your very twisted Too Story!
Wow. This is incredible. Congrats on the TS.
Extremely vivid imagery! "Like Jesus in the wild wilderness forty days and nights Meandering slowly, lips cracked, vainly pondering dark or light... 2am. Blessed sleep soothes the demons Freeing the real and frightening daemons!!!!!!!"
This is so captivating! I read it like it was being dramatically performed. "broken, fractured and fragmented dreams impinging" was my favourite line. This poem was so well written.
Demonically weighty & filled with portents.
This brought to mind those classic paintings of night terrors where the imp crouches on the sleeper's chest, though it seems in the end you managed to throw the little bugger off! Well-wrought!
Like Sir Phillip Sydney's songs for Estelle-Sleep the poor man's wealth
Whoaaa, this was so dark and intense! You really didn't hold back at all and that made this so phenomenal!
Novel, the agony in the struggle... and this line: "No seeds to give birth to flowers"....broke me. and then the color of the two trees...gold and red. Each reader must decide what they mean to them.
Those sins exposed...great stuff.
This was so intense. Brilliantly done and loved the use of the 2am wakefulness and sleep. Like the moment ijust before.🤍
I haven't had a crack at this yet. I can't hold a candle to the ones that have already gone up anyway! This is great 😁