Tranquil dreams
Poem about the complexities of schizophrenia
*PLEASE LISTEN TO THE SOUND WHILE YOU READ MY POEM ;)*
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The clouds were speaking to me. They weren't showing me visions, they were making sounds.
The sounds were quiet I could hear whispers. The whispers were scary.
I close my eyes to hear these sounds, not the whispers.
They were no longer sounds...or whispers.
They were echos, quieting down the incredulous voice in my head.
Why am I feeling peace for once?
Did my own battle win for once?
Maybe my fear was proof that my life had acquired ramifications.
I open my eyes and I'm the only one who exists now.
It feels too good to be real, I've never felt real before.
It's scary... feeling real is scary.
I fear the silence too, it's like reconnecting with a friend from many years ago.
Then suddenly you're not alone.
But I never really was alone anyway, I had my own private wars.
The war is my mind.
My mind is my body.
My body can't control my mind, the war.
My body feels defeated already.
Skepticism plays in my mind, however.
I can't explain it to anyone, or else I'm crazy.
Though, how can some so heartlessly declare that...
~That voice was never really there?
I must be going insane.
No wonder I do not make people comfortable,
I am a mirror~
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While reading my pieces, I want to incorporate music into my writing!
Side note: I don't have schizophrenia; I had a close friend who battled it.
Thank you for reading!! :D
About the Creator
Kodah
- Storyteller, Love/Romance, Dark, Surrealism, Psychological, Nature, Mythical, Whimsical
~𝓢𝓽𝓸𝓻𝓲𝓮𝓼 𝓬𝓪𝓷 𝓫𝓮 𝓪 𝓵𝓲𝓽𝓽𝓵𝓮 𝓭𝓮𝓮𝓹~
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Standing While Falling
Quotation from Friedrich Nietzsche "He who wrestles long with monsters should beware lest he himself become a monster. And if you gaze long into an abyss, the abyss also gazes into you. Man is not destroyed by suffering, but by the meaning he makes of it."
By LUCCIAN LAYTH6 days ago in Critique
Comments (34)
This was actually incredible.. I can actually relate to this not hearing things and stuff, but I'm always in my head so much I literally don't feel real or feel my body or anything and sometimes when my intrusive thoughts stop rarely I feel peace for a few seconds and feel connected to my old self. Anyway I subscribed I hope to can lmk what you think of my recent poem it's about mental illness too 💗💗💗
A poem can make someone want to cry, so it turns out. 😭 Such a profound, poignant, and perfect piece. "Why am I feeling peace for once? Did my own battle win for once?" So many lines hit hard, and the music was the perfect accompaniment. Thank you for writing this; something I didn't know I needed to read. And I hope your close friend is doing well. Also, sorry for putting this here, but if you haven't already I recommend reading Angela's "Symphony of love" piece inspired by you and your writing: https://shopping-feedback.today/humans/symphony-of-love%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E If you've already read it, sorry, lol 🙏
I'm way behind on enjoying your art, but that just makes it all more enjoyable when I binge. I love how you incorporate music!!! I love your artwork too. I'm a fan. ⚡💙⚡
Heartfelt & well written! Lovely artwork and enchanting music too!
You have such a way of saying a truth in a semi shocking but relatable way, such as never having felt real before.
I enjoy the read while listening to the tune. It remind me of the Celtic song, Forbidden Lullaby
It is comforting the music and the words together. Darkly wonderful words. Sad/happy and freeing. Do not fear silence. Embrace it.
Oh yes, the sound is soothing. This is beautiful yet so sad and happy at the same time. Your work is so hauntingly lovely K. Deserves its top spot. Kudos.
Oh Kodah, this made me tear up. I have known several people with schizophrenia and of course it, like many mental illnesses is a spectrum disorder and watching them navigate in our dominant neuro-typ world broke my heart. Thank you for sharing this.
Congratulations 👏🏻🎉
Kodah, this is lovely and haunting. Congrats on TS🤩 I love the painting leading in and you have captured the issue (although I don't know anyone with the disease) for us. The last part starting with - that voice….so strong!
It does work well with the sound!
Really compelling! Loved it <3
Fascinating. Well-done, Kodah!
Yay! Too story. Well done!
nice
"Tranquil dreams" evokes a sense of peacefulness and calmness, like drifting into a serene, restful sleep. Is there something specific you're thinking about in https://gloinfo.ng/how-to-unshare-data-on-glo/ relation to tranquil dreams, such as creating a calming environment for better sleep or perhaps exploring the symbolism behind dreams?
Melissa mentioned Perfect Blue and I immediately thought of it as well! Such a visceral and powerful poem.
Fantastic work! I love reading your poem with the soundtrack 💖. By the way congrats on your top story 👏
Love the soundtrack to your work. This was so powerful and I really hope your friend is doing ok.
Powerful. Congrats on a well deserved top story.
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Like Perfect Blue. Excellent piece
Wow! Really beautiful and full of feeling! Awesome job!
The charming , ethereal music generates a significant contrast with the poignant psychological struggle of your lyric "I," enriching the aesthetic experience your work creates. Nicely done!