Time Was...
a nonet
There was a time when conversation
Was easy as respiration.
Dad and Daughter, with a bond
Forever and beyond.
Time was harsh, somehow.
Change came, and now
The words fail,
Useless,
Stale.
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About the Creator
Dana Crandell
Dad, Stepdad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.
Poet, Writer, Editor, Photographer, Artist and Tech/Internet nerd.
My first published poetry collection: Life, Love & Ludicrosity
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Standing While Falling
Quotation from Friedrich Nietzsche "He who wrestles long with monsters should beware lest he himself become a monster. And if you gaze long into an abyss, the abyss also gazes into you. Man is not destroyed by suffering, but by the meaning he makes of it."
By LUCCIAN LAYTH5 days ago in Critique
Comments (18)
This broke my heart, Dana! So beautifully expressed. I'm on the other side of this one, and felt it deeply. Sending love and hope for healing.
Love the story you told here and the rhyme scheme you were able to sneak in with so few words and syllables!! Very impactful. Great work Dana!!
I love the bit about stale words, I feel like I know just what you mean 😁
I can relate to your poem in every way. Its emotional, and makes the reader think about ones relationship with a parent. It's been written beautifully.
Oh, this tugs on the heartstrings! :( Wonderfully executed, beautiful, but with sadness <3
I'm so sorry this happened to you 🥺 I hope things get better
So sad but incredibly well written. Well done Dana.
I just want to make a sad face here.
This is so heavy and has that ache of something so special being lost despite the person still being there! Great nonet, Dana!
Oh dear - the ebbs and flows of of parenthood. Loved this!
Oh my! That hit me in the feels way beyond any of the "couple" ones I read. Beautifully written, but heartbreaking.
I felt this in reversal; my sire is a delusional narcissist. You reveal your compassion.
❤️❤️❤️such brutal feels
Good work, but check your syllables in the last line.
Outstanding, Dana. Relationships are incredibly difficult, and you capture the complexities of a father-daughter bond well.
Sad and contemplative. Maybe there’s a way to mend the relationship?
I flinched at every word. You brilliantly expressed how this feels :( ~lil sis
This is a beautiful and sad poem about life and love of a father