The Winter Punk
~ a reimagining of Jack Frost ~
On sepia's lost-summer stage, squats a rebellious sage.
A great colourless punk.
Ruler of mulched-up funk,
hoary and sweaty with diamante evergreen firs bristled down the ridge of his back.
He arrived last night in our shivers.
Faster than light and brimming with smite, he rode in on a graffiti of stars, swirling to earth on mists to crash cars while spitting out crystals as kisses.
As he touched ground, he stretched out a love-hate hand and slapped the old gold land hard. All the while, he looked night deep in the eye, and with a tattoo of silent tears, he cried.
Without so much as dabbing a cheek, the moment he had landed, he strode on with his freak in a holy, mesmerising streak of tantric tessellation:
A petrified dance featuring captured angels in a trance, fluorescent in expanse and exaltation.
His is an elegant rage, born of an unwritten manifesto on an edgeless page. Rapturous and meaningless at once, it riddles all life and death with ruthless truth and airless breath and condemns beauty as a lie.
After his excretion was complete, he lay down for a sleep, exhaling peace in whispering murmuration:
A hushed song of souls, ghosts and old woes spiralling up into heavenly fascination.
Now, the sun threatens to rise into dawn's indigo-layered skies, and he lies awake among a skulk of silvery shadow. A lurking recluse. At odds and obtuse in the honied promise of tomorrow.
As day steals the way and blue beats brackish grey, it seems he still has one more punch in his hand. With white knuckles gripped and teeth brash with spit, he stares up at the dawn of the light.
Without a tremble in sight,
no fear...
just fight,
he steps proudly out from the dark.
Stark before larks. Hard and pock-marked, he stands fully frontal on old sepia's stage. He sticks out his chin, flashes a fuck-you-all grin, and, unto sun's first hello, he glitters.
About the Creator
Caroline Jane
CJ lost the plot a long time ago. Now, she writes to explore where all paths lead, collecting crumbs of perspective as her pen travels. One day, she may have enough for a cake, which will, no doubt, be fruity.




Comments (23)
I liked "teeth brash with spit" π
Excellent poem, congratulations on the well-deserved top story βοΈπ€
Great job and perfect ending with fu grin!! Congrats on TS. π₯³π₯³π₯³
I really enjoyed this. Well done!
wow this was off the charts good
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! ππππππ
What an outstanding narrative poem! Congrats on Top story, Caroline!
Well done on this one
Back to say congrats in Top Story Caroline!
Took them long enough! congrats on Top Story!
This is great and funny! I like it so much!
Oh my stars, that was powerful! Truly unique! My favourite part..."His is an elegant rage, born of an unwritten manifesto on an edgeless page. Rapturous and meaningless at once, it riddles all life and death with ruthless truth and airless breath and condemns beauty as a lie." A winner of a poem!
Well, there goes first place! Holy cow, this is good, Caroline!
Hehehehehehe I loved this so much, especially the grin!
Caroline, I love the impish voice you chose for the narrative voice! It made smile. You imagery in this prose was fun and so vivid! Very well done!
What an ending lol love the grin! β¨οΈππ Was not expecting it.
A masterpiece of writing, haunting and beautiful leaving us wanting more.
Wonderfully eerie and brilliant! Jack is a bit of a menace it would seem! Love it! πc
Superbly penned and creatively reimaged jack frost, loved it!!!β€οΈβ€οΈπ
What is there to shred? You consistently blow me away with your words β€οΈ
This was something else! Always adore your writing. So stirring, imaginative...evocative and full of depth! Bloody Brilliant, CAroline!
That was vicious. It read like a terrifying old fairy tale. Excellent work, my friend.
Some fun rhymes in your winter re-imagining , excellent work