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The Banishing

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By Rowan Finley Published about a year ago Updated about a year ago 1 min read
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Heaven’s tardy tears speckled

my face with free falling freckles.

Hurricane winds blended

hairy goosebumps, on skin suspended.

Feet, like tornados, hurried down slopes,

hyenas yipped and cracked crude jokes.

Outrunning arrows that were attempting,

to pierce strained back, along the wretched way, wincing.

Cast out from the tribunal tribe,

with no canny clan, now, to reside.

Dismissed, drenched in dusty disbelief,

yearned to erase or ease my particular past.

At last, macabre Moonbeam greeted

my chided cheek and solo team,

crawling into brash, bitter briers,

yearning for comfort of campfire.

Deerskin snagged and so did breath,

then, slipped into a deep sleep like death.

Stream of Consciousnesssurreal poetrynature poetry

About the Creator

Rowan Finley

Father. Academic Advisor. Musician. Writer. My real name is Jesse Balogh.

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  • Komal11 months ago

    Whoa, this one sweeps you up like a storm! Do you think banishment can ever be a blessing in disguise?

  • Just Danielabout a year ago

    I agree with all the others, wonderfully written poem, full of imagery and wonderful techniques like consonance amongst few others. Enjoyed reading this one very much! ^_^

  • Babs Iversonabout a year ago

    Fabulous stream of consciousness poem!!!❤️❤️💕

  • Archery Owlabout a year ago

    I love the imagery - especially at the end

  • Cindy Calderabout a year ago

    This is such a descriptively wonderful poem.

  • Jamye Sharpabout a year ago

    Very well described.

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