Stepping Off
For the Eclipse challenge
By Hannah MoorePublished 2 years ago • Updated 2 years ago • 1 min read
Photo by Fré Sonneveld on Unsplash
Ever get the feeling you've been cheated?
Cuckolded, tricked or deceived?
Lied to, taken for a ride to
Imply they have what you need?
Perhaps there's something you're missing, something that cannot be bought.
Something you turn to the skies for, to seek what your heart always sought.
Each moonrise a boon to be greeted, each sunbeam a gift to be caught.
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Reading around to learn acrostic poetry. This is absolutely beautiful. Nicely Done!!
The rhythm of this is beautiful and satisfying 😌
I really enjoy the cleverness and rhyme in this! I especially love the last line - it brings the quirkness together with a finishing elegance. Also, "cuckold" is new for me -- I'll be adding that to my list of cool words :)
Great use of the word "Cuckold" Cuckolded, tricked or deceived? This is a very clever piece
There is a lot of that going around these days. People using your attempts at kindness to their advantage. But one rises above it all to become the bigger person. Always i turn to the sky...down here is a shiteshow. Onward and upward we go.
I loved that I scanned and saw "cuckolded" as the opening for the C line...unique...this made me think a lot...but had a positivity to it.
Oh wow, I especially loved that last line! So powerful and optimistic! Loved your Acrostic!
As well as the symbolic last lines, I love how you’ve crafted the beginning of the poem to engage the reader 😊
This one flows really well, and I like the subtle shift in tone from beginning to end, especially with “ each sunbeam a gift to be caught”. Nicely done Hannah 👏🏾
I loved the rhythm of this as well as the message. Well, I loved what the poem was trying to highlight. That's what I meant.
"something that cannot be bought." Very creative acrostic! Love your poem! 💌
Very much liked the feel of this one. I don’t think I’ve read many that rhyme. Great job! Those last two lines are particularly magical!
DK's comments are spot on, Hannah. And on top of that, your final line rocks! Exceptional poem.
Love how the pivot from questions of discontent to the epiphany in the later lines was so smoothly and seamlessly executed! Very nice!
This was excellent…. Especially the last two lines.
Wow, Hannah, this was just so wonderful. I read it like 5 times just to enjoy it again and again.
This is beautiful, especially the last two lines.
I loved the last line especially! Great job!