The pre-dawn morn, to daylight bound
As hence the land lay barren still
A shimmering fleece doth blanket the ground
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The silver ash, with crystals crowned
Where once clung leaves, in death she spilled
The pre-dawn morn, to daylight bound
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The robin, long since flown southbound
My greeting song, the cardinal’s trill
A shimmering fleece doth blanket the ground
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The clouded sky with snow abounds
I wrap my scarf ‘neath the frosty chill
The pre-dawn morn, to daylight bound
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The footsteps' crunch, the only sound
In twirling mists, my breath distilled
A shimmering fleece doth blanket the ground
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The sparkling morn, my eyes astound
As lungs inhale the frigid thrill
Of predawn morn, to daylight bound
While shimmering fleece doth blanket the ground
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Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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Comments (26)
Beautifully written, as always! 😁
This was absolutely breath taking. Well done!!!
Beautiful!
gorgeous & brilliant!
Congratulations on the Honorable Mention this week with this story! Well done!
Yay Cathy!! Congrats on Honourable mention!!
That was so original ‘shimmering fleece’ I like that a lot. It reminds me of a white fleece I have, it’s my favourite fleece to wear. I like that you gave each thing a spotlight, especially the robin. The repeating line you chose were very effective in casting our minds on the shimmering fleece and the theme of this poem. Definitely a memorable piece. Congratulations for your honourable mention under most discussed stories on this weeks leaderboard 🎉🥳🎊
This felt like I was taken back in time, to a simpler, cosier time. Such a beautiful poem.
Such a cozy, winter vibe! The way you describe the frosty morning with the snow and quiet crunching steps just feels peaceful. It’s like being wrapped up in a fluffy blanket of winter joy. Simple and beautiful!😍❤️
I love a good villanelle! Very well done, Cathy!
So well done, Cathy! You took on a tough one and nailed it, right down to the dialect!
Brilliant absolutely brilliant!!! Love it, my friend!!!❤️❤️💕
Classic. Like something we would have read in school. Beautiful, Cathy
I love the format you chose for this Challenge, Cathy. The Villanelle works brilliantly for this type of poem, and you perfectly crafted it. Beautiful poem. Well done!
Beautiful Villanelle!
Lovely, beautiful work Cathy!💕 Your poem perfectly conveys the frosty chill and icy temperatures of winter!❄️😊
Oh my, this was stunning! Loved your poem!
Hey Cathy! Sounds like you have this form down pat! 🥶 🙂👍
I love this poem so much and its Elizabethan or Shakespearean style of wording. It's really ever so lovely, Cathy.
Love the old timey feel of the V-nelle. Lovely prose, a joy to read.
I loved your Villanelle, Cathy! Shimmering fleece doth blanket the ground is a wonderful line. I loved the echo of it at the end!
Love the line - in twirling mists. Just beautiful! Made me feel cold reading it - brrrr! 🥶
Yep another Cathy Holmes masterpiece
Cathy, I absolutely adore this poem!! the language used and overall flow of it is just superb!!
Excellent writing my friend.