scratches in my mind - from apathy to dystrophy
Another introspective, inspirational, thought-provoking senryu-duo for my series!
By Paul StewartPublished about a year ago • 1 min read
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a-path-y of mind
if unchallenged, can lead to
a-trophy of sense
*
Ent-ropy of sense
unless addressed, can lead to
dys-trophy of mind
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Author's Notes: Oh, how happy I was when all those words had three syllables! This is another entry into my ongoing "scratches in my mind" series of senryu.
I love that the title's first part plays into the poem's themes in addition to just representing the series!
Here is the previous one in the series:
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Comments (16)
I got the first one which is relatable! Had to look up the latter two ophys! for part 2. I like these ideas and execution a lot!
A thought provoking set of haikus indeed! Well done Paul-itical!! 😉
Wise, well-chosen words! This will make for interesting reflection.
This is mind blowingly good!! First stanza is a jaw dropper and the second lands a punch! Outstanding word play, Paul!
Thought-provoking!!! ❤️❤️💕
I loved this play on words. Well done, Mr. Wordsmith.
The toxic pathway-very nice use of those words
Your mind is way more out there then I am able to adapt too. I like it
Whoaaaa Sir Paul, that was soooo profound! Loved it so much 🍩🥐
A moral lesson with a cogent warning. I love the use of apathy, atrophy, entropy and dystrophy for a downward trending pathway to a loss of empathy. Perceptive, deep and wise as always, Paul!
So cleverly crafted!
I feel like this was really satisfying to write!
Interesting thoughts, Sir!
These are great and thought-provoking senryu. Well done, my friend!
Senryu? Hmmm. OK, Haiku v Senryu, this made me smile.
This is something to really think about.