I like looking at you in the dark
A piece of you in my mind
hmm, we have been trapped like this before
A never ending loop of harsh teachers
Giving us grades only based on fear
And here we are, looping into a madness
Created by a desert of knowledge that was surface level, sand-Sahara-dry, and devoid of water,
I know we are trapped, but at least you are here with me
In the dark, we can hear one another, an old comfort I cannot place
A mix of feelings that other people may have tried to evoke
But with you, red flowing waterfall,
I think it’s you
That sounds like real wisdom
And real cute, too, if I may say, though I’m much too polite to express such a red throated presumption, a white hot passion that
Your strong short phrased ideas prevail
“Th-Thanks for that,” you drone off in a quiet stutter, in that sifting voice that makes all the poison go away.
I like looking at you in the dark
It feels safer
Because I want to lock my eyes with yours, but all that blocking stuff,
The stuff we say to push each other away,
Is darker than the lights being shut off,
And I want so badly to see you
And for you to dream of it, too
Red flowing waterfall of mine.
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Comments (14)
Beautiful piece!
It was so much fun!
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A beautifully wrought slice of life, as usual!
Beautiful piece. Well done.
A brilliant concept for a poem! And you tell it so well! Enjoyed this read, Melissa. Great job!
I was surprised by this one (maybe I shouldn't have read it surrounded by the dark). But dreams can be all the light we need... Interesting and interested...
Outstanding surreal poem!!! Yeah! Congrats on Top Story!!!💖💕
Outstanding surreal poem!!! Yeah! Congrats on Top Story!!!💖💕
a little bit of magic this!
I LOVE this!!!
Wonderful! Congratulations on your Top Story!
So delicious - nice work!
Love this and congratulations on your Top STory Sis
Congratulations on your #TopStory for this poem!