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I like looking at you in the dark

A piece of you in my mind

By Melissa IngoldsbyPublished 3 years ago Updated 3 years ago 1 min read
Top Story - October 2022

hmm, we have been trapped like this before

A never ending loop of harsh teachers

Giving us grades only based on fear

And here we are, looping into a madness

Created by a desert of knowledge that was surface level, sand-Sahara-dry, and devoid of water,

I know we are trapped, but at least you are here with me

In the dark, we can hear one another, an old comfort I cannot place

A mix of feelings that other people may have tried to evoke

But with you, red flowing waterfall,

I think it’s you

That sounds like real wisdom

And real cute, too, if I may say, though I’m much too polite to express such a red throated presumption, a white hot passion that

Your strong short phrased ideas prevail

“Th-Thanks for that,” you drone off in a quiet stutter, in that sifting voice that makes all the poison go away.

I like looking at you in the dark

It feels safer

Because I want to lock my eyes with yours, but all that blocking stuff,

The stuff we say to push each other away,

Is darker than the lights being shut off,

And I want so badly to see you

And for you to dream of it, too

Red flowing waterfall of mine.

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About the Creator

Melissa Ingoldsby

My work:

Patheos,

The Job, The Space Between Us, Green,

The Unlikely Bounty, Straight Love, The Heart Factory, The Half Paper Moon, I am Bexley and Atonement by JMS Books

Silent Bites by Eukalypto

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Nice work

Very well written. Keep up the good work!

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    The story invoked strong personal emotions

  2. Excellent storytelling

    Original narrative & well developed characters

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    Well-structured & engaging content

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    Creative use of language & vocab

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    Writing reflected the title & theme

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    Niche topic & fresh perspectives

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    Zero grammar & spelling mistakes

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  • Nick Scibilia3 years ago

    Beautiful piece!

  • Chilcosta3 years ago

    It was so much fun!

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  • A beautifully wrought slice of life, as usual!

  • Cathy holmes3 years ago

    Beautiful piece. Well done.

  • The Dani Writer3 years ago

    A brilliant concept for a poem! And you tell it so well! Enjoyed this read, Melissa. Great job!

  • Kendall Defoe 3 years ago

    I was surprised by this one (maybe I shouldn't have read it surrounded by the dark). But dreams can be all the light we need... Interesting and interested...

  • Cucchia Tin3 years ago

    Outstanding surreal poem!!! Yeah! Congrats on Top Story!!!💖💕

  • Babs Iverson3 years ago

    Outstanding surreal poem!!! Yeah! Congrats on Top Story!!!💖💕

  • Bren3 years ago

    a little bit of magic this!

  • RachelAnn3 years ago

    I LOVE this!!!

  • Dawn Salois3 years ago

    Wonderful! Congratulations on your Top Story!

  • KJ Aartila3 years ago

    So delicious - nice work!

  • Love this and congratulations on your Top STory Sis

  • Judey Kalchik 3 years ago

    Congratulations on your #TopStory for this poem!

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