When you asked if I still loved you, I opened my mouth to speak, but the answer froze on my tongue.
You looked to me for clarity. When I tried to smile, my frosty tears made your hair stand on end.
The scent of betrayal has become an unbreachable glacier between us.
Still, you reached out to hold my hand. I flinched from the cold and turned away.
But then your kiss, which chilled on my lips, still tasted of the memories that once melted my heart.
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Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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Comments (39)
Awww this is great Cathy!💔
I can feel the pain and coldness between you two. It's sad how love can turn into something so frozen.
Heartbreaking nd it's lovely
Really thought provoking piece on the complexity of love, its not always so sweet,, Its shades of bitter, dark and light
Nice work! Congrats on TS!
This is truly excellent writing. Very deserving of Top Story.
Your impactful words beautifully portray a deep emotional conflict. ✨The poem presents a frigid clash of love and trust, where coldness and tears consume the sweetness of love. "But then your kiss, which was cold on my lips, still tasted of the memories that melted my heart." This line is special and remarkable because it expresses the complexity where sweet memories of the past struggle with the bitterness of the present. It encapsulates the depth of love and the pain that accompanies it, residing deep within my heart.💫 The structure of the lines and the choice of words make it even more powerful, as it depicts the tension between coldness and warmth. You have truly done an amazing job! Congratulations on being chosen as a Top Story!💥
love may be retained where the trust has shattered...
Yay Cathy!! Congrats on Top Story!!!
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Back to say congratulations on the much deserved Top Story recognition .
This is so visually beautiful Congratualtions
I really like this one.
well written
This is so smooth and gorgeous. Congratulations!
You are just a beautiful, evocative writer, Cathy. Honestly. sublime. Congrats on Top Story!
Love this
Great entry! Full of emotion.
Wow Cathy this is why you place in so many challenges
That last line really choked me up. This is writing at its best.
This is quite powerful, and given the wintry atmosphere it conjures, I think it is quintessentially Canadian!
Mixed emotions but still, that sting of love gone sour! Beautiful Cathy!!
Oh, but I really love this sensory poem. The heading picture alone piques the reader's interest but then each line of descriptive words overwhelms to enhance the already begun captivation.
Beautifully written and such vivid, chilly imagery <3 Gorgeous, my friend!
The scene you painted in this is so striking! Such wistfulness in the final line