Ferris Wheel
Can she get off this ride or is she doomed for life?
He left her
Blindfolded in the middle of the forest
Her hands outstretched searching into nothingness
Into emptiness
Into darkness
The absence of him was so loud
~~~~~
He dumped her like trash
But she was made of glass
She tried piecing herself together
But there would always be a piece missing
Him
~~~~~
She questioned her own sanity
Replayed every memory
From the waves of laughter
To the gaslighting fights
But without closure, it was a never-ending Ferris Wheel ride
~~~~~
He was happily moving on with another girl
She bawled her eyes out every night thinking of him
The years passed by
Slowly she got over him
Not completely
But she believed she will eventually
~~~~~
One day, he texts her
To invite her to his wedding
She politely declined
Her once golden heart
Is now a burnt charcoal
She just can't bless them both to be happily married
~~~~~
That same night, she dreamt of him
He said "You're the one for me"
"Then why are you marrying her?"
He failed to answer
~~~~~
She woke up
Crying and screaming
She broke down the same way she did all those years ago
She realised he doesn't have a HEART
Yet HE mastered the ART of breaking her HEART
And she will always be on this never-ending Ferris Wheel ride
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Comments (25)
Wow, This guy sucks. She deserves someone who will love her fully and truly 💛💛💛
Ooof I felt this one in my soul! I know this heartbreak all too well, in fact, I can imagine our queen T-Swizzle writing something like this! Such a raw, poignant and relatable poem - well done as always, Dharr!
Loving how the subtitle rhymes. Love how your words here are thrown at us with passion. Especially when you wrote alone that is really short. Then follow up with a longer line. This was deep, especially when it came to talk about the gaslighting fights — the memory of it being like a never ending ferris wheel ride. Very impressed with this anology. Invite her to his wedding?! What cold hearted squirrel he was ugh!! WTH!! Oooo the charcoal part is also very pleasing to the imagination. Even in her dream he failed to answer why he's marrying her?! Gosh this hurts so much to read. But in a way that's also beautifully poetic. Mastered the art of breaking her heart. Absolutely love how you broke the words into two there. 🤗❤️
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Wonderful 🍀🍀🍀
Wow deep and emotional. Excellent poem.
Ferris Wheel is the perfect title for this emotional piece of art.
The final lines convey a sense of growth and transformation, even though scars remain, your words capture the complexities of love and loss with honesty and authenticity, wonderful work, thanks for sharing!
Beautifully done!
I still love this one!! Its impact and emotional draw is so relatable and beautifully captured here!! I love that even in a second round of reading this still has the same impact!! Great work!!
Thank you Dharrsheena! A great poem! Heartfelt.❤️
I kept hearing a ZZ Ward song when I read this so I thought I'd share it. https://youtu.be/adCt_Jmd96g
Oh I want to cry. The way this went surprised me and I loved seeing and feeling the roller coaster ride of emotions. I feel so badly for this speaker, whoever she is. That dream sequence on was just perfectly written. 💜
Excellent Dharrsheena! Again thank you for writing and publishing this first poem. Your talent unleashed! As the day has progressed, I have been reading the posts on Vocal+ to a friend. Deeply moved again by your writing, he relates with lived experience: ‘She questioned her own sanity Replayed every memory From the waves of laughter To the gaslighting fights But without closure, it was a never-ending Ferris Wheel ride’ Such a Sunday to be cherished. No matter the genre you excel and inspire. Pauline 🌸
Dharrsheena, this was beautiful and heartbreaking and relatable! I feel like the lines " Her once golden heart Is now a burnt charcoal" says it all. You never forget your first heartbreak and in some cases you never forgive it either! You were able to portray such raw, passionate emotions in this poem. I am in awe of your talent! 💜
Love the HE-"HE-ART" connection you made--a real master of the art of breaking hearts. So sad and so real.
Heartbreaking, relatable, painful, and so beautifully written. Great work!
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Great poem!
Love this. I think a lot of people can probably relate.
Sad, yet wonderfully written.
Beautiful and heartbreaking all in one! You capture the emotions so beautifully!
Emotionally heartfelt. Crafted beautifully with perfect storytelling ability. 'He dumped her like trash but she was made of glass' really lovely visual words here.
A sad, imperfection of the human animal. To get caught in a love trap by a heart that doesn't know how to get free. Set by a hunter who enjoys the chase more than the capture. Whos lack of a heart can't see the damage that he causes. Well done. A story well spun. Nice job 👍
very interested.