Fair
An Entry for the Sensational II Challenge
The cold bites my face, needling my nose and my fingertips as October brings in the frigid air of Autumn, its ice touch welcome as it heralds sparks of excitement, and breath that can be seen;
The sweetness of warm onions and spun sugar permeates the air, a strange, teasing, caramelised combination, its dense temptations beguiling and coaxing lick-lipping smacks.
But first, to fun: it is Fair Night and darkness revels in the sharp screams that overlay the buzz of generators and hawkers' cries; bass attacks and retreats, shaking ear-drums while sirens whoop.
Ducks, dartboards, giant pandas, hooks, and little fishies in bags, the street path leads through their lurid colour leaking, the strobing probing strobe of heady speed and thrills poking at eyes, and the towering stripes of the sedate sentinel Helter Skelter, reaching up as ladybirds crawl.
I hold my money tightly, a thrillseeker in the night, keen to grip the railings of the gravity-defying, the cheek-tightening, the giggle-inducing: the fair's gaudy magic reaches for my young self and rattles me senseless with its fast moves.
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Your beautiful description perfectly captioned the feeling of a fair, being overwhelmed by all its attractions!🍭🍬
I especially like the very last sentence Rachel, and this certainly conveys a fantastic sense of wonder and fun across it! Like a kid taking it all in, everything at once.
This literally makes me want to get on a plane and come home. Brilliant.
Nailed it. The sounds smell and especially the noise is in my head now. All the stuff I used to love would probably give me a migraine now. Not to mention the food. Oh dear.
What an experience to capture in words! Now I want to go to a fair!
This poem is a splendid way to herald the season of fall! It paints such vivid pictures of all the fun times, especially as a child or teen, spent at the Fall Fairs. Splendid response to the given prompt, Rachel!
Rachel this was such a wonderful set of prose of the sensation 2 challenge!! I love the scenery you painted and all the fun of being at fair!! Takes me back...
Its the fair season and this got me all jazzed!
Oh, I this sure brought back golden memories… I especially like: “ the giggle-inducing: the fair's gaudy magic reaches for my young self and rattles me senseless with its fast moves.”😍
That kinda made me feel overstimulated 😅😅 I loved your poem!
You have done such a superb job with this....so descriptive and evoked all of my senses from fairs gone-by...I was there again :)
Wonderful✨😍
A wild ride for the entire, empirical array; deftly done!
Exhilarating!