Dishonest Backstabber
How could something happen so fast but in slow motion?
She wandered through the forest
Scavenged for her pieces
Lub-dub... lub-dub... lub-dub...
Their symphony summoned her
~~~~~
Though shattered into pieces
They each retained their lives
Scintillated with each beat
Inklings for their locations
~~~~~
Discovered them one by one
Scattered haphazardly around
Embraced them while bawling
Soon to be unscathed and hers again
~~~~~
They were dying embers
Rather than a sempiternal inferno
She had to restore them all alone
Self isolated in a forest cottage
~~~~~
Arduous jigsaw pieces
They repelled each other
Refused to convalesce
To become pristine again
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Nursed it relentlessly for Nine years
The phobics slowly became philics
Only a few pieces more to be adhered
For her heart to look brand new
~~~~~
One day, a Sailer arrived unbidden
She never questioned the absurdity
Although the sea was far away
Always gave the benefit of the doubt
~~~~~
He promised her a Magic Glue called Love
Guaranteed to agglutinate the remaining pieces
She travelled far and wide with him
For the sake of her heart, she trusted him
~~~~~
Came a long way from the forest
To the sea with so much faith in him
It all happened so fast yet in slow motion
He tied her up to his anchor
~~~~~
He let it plunge down and watched her sink
As her soul dissociated from her body
She vowed to haunt him forever
Cursed him to suffer an eternal living hell
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Comments (128)
It resembles an ancient tragedy in a modern version. The emotion it conveys touches the very nerves. And he must have been quite a tough one…
Congratulations on this top story that I didn't 'top-story-congratulate' you on before! You ROCK Dharrsheena!
Great
Wow. This is very dark and I really enjoyed it!
Whew. Women and seamen don't mix.
Such an imagination you have, Dhar and talent too. The emotion is rich and well-conveyed! Congrats on a well-deserved TS!
i love your story
The theme of finding and restoring one's broken pieces is powerful and resonates deeply. The progression from hope to betrayal adds a dramatic element to the narrative. The poem captures the pain of heartbreak and the strength of the protagonist's spirit. Have a nice day!
Such haunting piece
If there were writer's teams for a contest to the depths...you would SOOOO be on my team! Would scare everyone else senseless 🤣but yeah 😱 we'd WIN! 😁 You could literally write someone into a waking nightmare and they would FEEL it. 😮
Haunting imagery and wonderful cadence! Lub dub Lub dub Lub dub. Dark is beautiful and compelling in its own way. Sunshine and shadow - all one coin. Loved it!!
OMG, "He let it plunge down and watched her sink" . Amazing
The human mind is frightening! Well done.
Absorbing. You have a way with words.
This is written very well. It spikes up the emotions in reader. So have you taken revenge? Or are you waiting?
Beautifully written.
👍🏾👌🏾Perfect. 🧡🧡🍊Article of the week. 💯
Love the folkloric vibe on this one!
Ouch. Love the metaphor of the anchor. Really nice!
OMG the last two stanzas 😳 Nice job!!
This is so relatable and so heartbreaking, I feel that familiar ache and remember that need for revenge after the pain subsides!! This is so well written, I love this piece!
Very well written story in a poem. Speaks of the heartache when we have been broken.
Other than loving this piece for the brilliant way in Which it is written, I worry for you. I truly hope there is more for you out there, my heart aches to think you are in pain. Now I ramble .. From a friend you’ve never met but hope you realize you have. Jason
Nice writing...it's captivating and great imagination. I loved it...
you really captured the dissolution of faith... the depth of pain. great work