dawn
[Edit: My first entry to the Tattoo That Line Challenge. There's a line in this one I would definitely get tattooed on my body, if that was my cup of tea. I hope it's clear which it is, otherwise it's not such a great line as I think it is.] My fourth entry to the nonet challenge. Breakups are an end, but they are also a beginning. They hurt, but they can also shape you, and show you what you're made of. Intimacy means vulnerability, which takes courage. Enjoy! I'll include a note in the comments with links to my other entries. (PS. I googled "how many syllables in shield" just to be absolutely sure!)
maybe love's a bloody battle ground
heat, screaming, body fluids.
shieldless. impaled. pain. fury.
draw the sword from your gut
and swing it, with your
face turned to the
glorious
blood-red
dawn
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"You're going to have to help me move the body." Julie stood in the doorway to my room, which was a cell really, and she was as close to breathless as I'd ever seen her. She looked dashing in the moonlight, and lit up with the glow of adventure.
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This is an extremely powerful poem. I love it!
This is like reading an inkblot test in lovely poetry form; the pacing and the language-blows to the heart all force the reader to identify what kind of fight they've fought. It's captivating and a fresh approach - great job!
Oh my, this is marvelous. So many profound emotions here - mixed with sensory. I was able to imagine myself bleeding out into the sky! Awesome nonet! I hope to also read some of your fiction soon - been busy with the beginning of school but I'll be back! 🤗❤️
Impressive Nonet🤩.
I don’t know how I missed this one, but it really is great, LC!
A smart way of describing breakups as a battle, and I think dawn also brings the idea of beginnings and endings with it too.
Intense and descriptive. Loved it!
Excellent. Break-ups are not pretty. Tell it like it is, I say.
Oooo, I loveeeeee how intense this was!
Wow! Could feel the fury! This was so good.
Like a forge!
Your battlefield breakup nonet poem is worthy of being sung. Well done yet again.
I think this is my favourite of yours.
Yes! I like the take on this one, L.C! Very empowering.
https://youtu.be/IGVZOLV9SPo?si=tstE6RRV2P_HoJMU
a/n:- Thank you for reading! This one might feel familiar - this is the second one that I reworked from an old idea for this challenge. If you'd like to read the longer, more free-form version, it's here: https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/burn-n44l50iwi%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E Here are my other entries to this challenge, if you'd like to have a look: https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/burn-a-nonet%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/knot-for-you%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/broken-fgo0jpl%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">