I was Narcissus today
Laying on my side
Gazing at my phone
Wishing
To see
To be
Myself
In your world
Trailing fingers
Across words and phrases
Swirling the surface
Grasping for something
Intangible
Beyond reach
We project ourselves
Onto the writing
Of others
To imagine what else
We could become
Forms to embody
Sliding door lives
We could have tread
It’s not that I
Don’t love my life
But I wonder sometimes
What it would be like
To love you
Freud might speculate
You are my mother
My father
My unmet need
But I know with surety
You are a gateway
Heimdall
Guardian of the rainbow bridge
All-seeing wise one
Able to hear grass grow
Powerful watch-keeper
Sounding golden Gjallenhorn
Bellowing mighty vibrations
Transporting worthy travellers
To other realms
Of consciousness
Dole out your mead
Overfill our cups
For beauty and villains
Play out in your prose
As naiads frolic
Where water flows
All gods belong together
For they only thrive
Through literature’s grace
Those left unwritten
Have been forgotten
Perhaps this is why
We long to discover
Our reflection
In the tales you scrawl
Doling out immortality
By the majesty
Of your pen
Accept this self-centred sacrifice
Deem me worthy to
Drown in your cosmos
Flesh rendered pulp
Pressed into pages
Reborn to become
The body of
Your work
Do not stint the offering
We only live on
Because of you
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For Poppy’s prompt on Narcissus which you can find here:
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Comments (10)
I love the idea of a current day Narcissus being lost to the phone and the desire to be immortal through our words
This is so well done. I LOVE how you related Narcissus to your life. You did an incredible job. So many awesome lines in this one.
Well done… I especially liked lines like these: “ Sounding golden Gjallenhorn Bellowing mighty vibrations Transporting worthy travellers To other realms”
Okay I am going to say it. You're the absolute queen at taking photos. My word! The huge covering of clouds, that small eye of blue. Then the half circle and the texture in the sand 😍 Oh what I would do if I was able to hear grass grow like the all seeing wise one. I love how the base meaning was you reaching out to make yourself known, becoming like narcissus. But being able to delivery that thought and wish to us as if it took no effort at all. The intellectual and spiritual height you took this to, was breathtaking. You will live on in your words, all of them, especially in this piece. ♥️🤗
Holy mythological masterpiece! Took my breath away (literally held my breath when reading, haha). So glad to see another entry from you for Poppy's prompt. I'm hoping to see you enter more of Vocal's challenges. You are so good at this! Also, I love the little theme you have of one-word titles (most of the time they're words I don't even know, haha). Athanasia is a great word!
This is beautifully written too! Your words feel like a bridge between worlds, full of longing and wonder.
A great take on the challenge , really enjoyed this
Unmet need made me think a lot because it could either be a need that has not been met, or a need that you've not met before and hence didn't know you needed it. I loved your take on the prompt and your photo is stunning! Also, not me reading your title as Euthanasia 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
Love this to bits! this exquisite verse: "Deem me worthy to Drown in your cosmos Flesh rendered pulp Pressed into pages" Hats off... Kudos
Wow love this! Excellent vocabulary and flow 💜💜💜