The race to an unknown finish,
Chaos screams in my mind.
An air of burnt oil and metal,
The taste of my iron-coated tongue.
Numb.
About the Creator
Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
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Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
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Comments (26)
An incredible poem.
This is the perfect climate change awareness poem to be read at the forefront of change aimed at stopping people from the dumb ish they've been doing to the planet. Well done Cathy!
For some reason, climate change immediately popped into mind here- perhaps because of the mention of oil. Ah but then reading the comments and looking more closely at the picture, it starts to come together. I like how you've kept this brief in words Cathy, as the brevity packs more of a punch I think.
Powerful micro story poem Cathy, well done 👏
Excellebt challenge entry
Wow that revved to a finish! Nicely done ❤️
Iron coated tongue is a powerful sensation. Sounds an awful lot like combat! Really well done, Cathy!
oof, this is intense. Amazing imagery, my friend!
You pull no punches with these, do you 😁
Excellent sensory poem✅… “chaos screaming…” is my favourite line.
Oooo, I especially loved the iron coated tongue and numb. So well done!
Superb, Cathy! Your words capture such a tragic moment perfectly.
I’m not sure how you managed to tell so much of a story in so few lines. Wow.
Woah! So much in such short lines! Masterfully done!
So powerful, felt a sense of death with the iron tasted tongue.
This feels like it would be very loud
I read this several times over. Incredibly powerful and perfectly written. Sensory indeed!
Whoa. The taste of a crash is tough indeed. Brilliant.
Gripping, terrifying, and (in every sense) sensational!! Amazing work, as always :)
If you're numb, it's already too late. Well done.
Vision of chaos , car crash and disaster, all in so few words
Brilliant
Oof, felt like I got hit head on! So few words to elicit such a scene. Bravo, Queen :)
Sounds like it was a wild ride! Well done!
Well now...this is giving me all kinds of emotions and thoughts, Cathy. Love this. Just what a wonderful example of brevity in action! damn straight. I look forward to congratulating you on at least a Top Story for this, buddy! Well bloody done.