A Vignette of a Relationship
An Entry for the Sensational II Challenge
By Rachel DeemingPublished about a year ago • 1 min read
Photo by Alexandra Gorn on Unsplash
He enters. Adversity rings.
Scent marrs each luxuriant lily,
Telling of untrueness. Carefully handling,
She intimates, gaudy heads taunting:
Tearful as sourness' treachery emerges.
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Comments (17)
Very cleverly done, on so many levels! 👍🏼
Wow that was cool. Such a creative awesome take on the challenge
Rachel.... I literally just yelled in my previously quiet home "OH My GOd!!" Because I see what you did here!! You are fricken brilliant!! 🤯
How clever, Rachel!! What a scene and word choice!
This is so brilliant! It packs some powerful meaning and imagery.
Very clever and what an outstanding last line.
What a clever idea... Well done!
Interesting! This is great!
That was so clever, and so well done.
Oh wow... that is clever!!
Loved the title!!! And then was impressed with the use of the acrostic type lines you did :) Great one!!
Well … that certainly raises your game ! As Paul says, bloody well done!
Ooh, I like what you did there.
Ay Carumba, chumbawumba, this is artistry at its best. Love the acrostic lines, hate the reality of your evocative words. But, ultimately, bloody well done!
Well-wrought and an exceedingly clever use of the acrostic form!
Whoaaaa, an acrostic of each of the senses! This was brilliant!
Love this!