Secrets From Beyond
Doors Revisited
there was only one rule, don’t open the door
But the key lay there on the table, begging to be held, pleading to be plunged into that lock, fulfilling its purpose.
He’d waited his whole life to know the mystery it kept. What secrets lingered behind that splintered wood. What forces conjured the imagination of the ones proceeding him.
Everyone he’d ever known feared the unknown retribution for betraying the warning. So, this moment demanded the fear he was feeling. It had been the talk about town since he was a kid, followed by the same warning that he honored, until today.
Today, he grasped that key, like it was his last breath. Every moment he had survived before, led him to this place at this exact time. He knew he had been predestined to be the one who would unveil the mystery of the door.
As he took his next breath, the air turned cold and he watched as the vapor from his lips floated to the lock and danced around it like an invitation he was unable deny.
The floorboards moaned a warning as he slowly approached the door. His heart racing faster than the wind proceeding a hurricane.
As he placed the key into the lock he heard a small voice from the other side call his name, and he froze.
“Welcome home, Charlie.”
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Kelli Sheckler-Amsden
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Comments (11)
"floorboards moaned a warning" ..great!
Uh oh... Shades of Willie Wonka? Probably not!
Are you going to add to the mystery later some time. Good work and luck.
Incredulous mystery ladened with fear and suspense: good luck 🤞 in the challenge Kelli!
I love this line ... he watched as the vapor from his lips floated to the lock and danced around it like an invitation he was unable deny. There is definitely an air of suspense. Well done.
I felt the tension build in this one. Really well done.
Creepy good! Excellent entry
Well-wrought! A small voice? Perhaps that of the inner child? There's a Ray Bradbury vibe to this, that ethereal moment where we must question: is this wonder or terror? I love that!
That ending is chilling, but it does beg the question of what is on the other side talking to him? I think that you could even expand this micro into a full-length story to answer that question, if you wanted. Of course, there is a sort of disturbing element to just leaving it hanging like this.
Your story and the other ones that I have read dealing with this prompt are very creepy, but what happens next.
This gave me the chills...