Atonement
Spooky Micro-Fiction Submission 3

“There is only one rule: don’t open the door,” said the old priest.
His voice pulled me from the strangest of slumbers. The room was cold and sterile. There were hundreds of us, each standing in one of the innumerable lines, entirely without clothes, dressed only in shame.
I had no recollection of coming here. There were no lights, but it was a bright place with no shadows.
One of the many priests was working on the man directly before me with a tattoo gun. His body a canvas of ornate script not written with ink, but carved.
Of all the bleeding words, my eyes fell on murderer.
Slowly sound came to me. Thousands of voices wailing agony. Squealing wheels bearing carts with the most arcane and rudimentary tools of torture rolled in.
“Choose your atonement,” the priest said to the murderer, but the man fled through the forbidden door, “What a waste.”
Another man screamed. His fingers were being clipped off; each one erasing a bloody word from his flesh. A terrible understanding dawned. The priest looked at me, “Next.”
What would they carve into my skin?
My eyes darted to the door.
“Why not seek atonement?” asked the priest.
I looked at the man without fingers. Beyond him, out the windows, nude masses drenched in blood rode escalators.
Panicked, I bolted for the door. It opened wide and shut behind me. There was no handle on this side. The metal grating chewed through the bottom of my feet, the walls closed in so I couldn’t sit. There was a hiss of a furnace, I looked down in time to see the flame swallow me. The fire didn’t eat, didn’t deform, it only seared with the most exquisite pain. Above me a loud speaker came on, “Welcome to eternity.”
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Comments (17)
Dang! That wa scary
Such provocative images! Well done!
well written, you are doing a great job👌
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Cue Zeppelin— “and he’s burning a stairway to hell”. Nice job!
This is terrifying and incredibly well-written. Each line was scarier than the last and the premise is amazing. Perfectly done!
Yumm
Fantastic! This absolutely drips of atmosphere and a visceral yet haunting terror. You did a lot in a little.
I'm scared.
Great Read, Awsome Story 😊
If you make Dharrsheena, happy you must be doing something right. Pretty sure I'm gonna regret reading this right before going to bed. Great horror fest, Blake!
Oooo, I absolutely loved all the blood here hehehehhehee. A veryyyyy delicious story!
Oh my gosh. I could see this.
Blake's best 300 word story to date. I could see the story unfold as I read the words. Very insightful and thought provoking. Looking forward to his next submission.
Holy moly. If this was a film, I would be watching from behind the sofa! This was terrifyingly horrific! Well done Blake - this was ace.
Incredible. Powerful imagery, deep and dark. Truly masterful writing here, well done.
That was brutal, and flowed with precision. My feet hurt now, haha. Eternity sucks!!!