The Angelmaker
Vocal Community Microfiction Series - Criminal
Lucille listened to the woman babble.
"Little Mary won't stop coughing! Charles is useless and there's nothing to eat. I don't know what to do!"
Lucille felt a pang of pity. She knew this woman. They went to church together; her, her husband and their five children.
Lucille filled a tiny bottle. "Here." She pressed it gently into the woman's palm.
The woman stared at it, gawking. Then, slowly, her fingers folded over the bottle.
"This will help her sleep?" The woman's voice was hoarse -
Decisive.
Lucille smiled beatifically.
"Like an angel."
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This feels more like a story of pity and sacrifice, even though it's not sacrifice of the self. Lucille, has "The Angelmaker" since medicine at that time is limited in supply and medicinal advancements. Especially since Lucille knew of little Mary's ailment, and that it might only get worse and eventually spreading, it might've just been easier to give her a (at least I'm hoping it was) quick and painless death and hope that it didn't spread to the rest of the family. Disease sucks cause it's one of the many things that a parent cannot protect their children from. I saw a video of a baby with whooping cough once, and that shit broke my heart. Hearing a baby wheeze and gasp for air after having a horrible coughing fit, and being in so much pain from not being able to breathe in from coughing so badly just pains You to watch. Cause You want to help them, but if You're not a medical professional or just lack the bare minimum knowledge required, You're seeing the life of somebody completely dependent upon You fade away. Just the lethargy alone is painful.
Oh. That was dark, and wonderful. Well done.
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OH....oh my! Great job with this one, Loryne!
The start of this made me think you were going for a tautogram!
🤭 oh no! Super well done!
Oh my goodness
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