Lost Voice
A Story Every Day in 2024 11th Sept 255/366
I remember the moment my voice disappeared. Not lost. Taken. I know where it is.
Florence. A humid afternoon, metallic clouds building. An encounter on a deserted street.
She was ethereal. Our eyes locked: my mind stilled. Wraith-like, she floated towards me, linear in her path. I felt her breath, cooling my skin.
She lifted her fingers, stroked my neck. A thunderclap, a hammering of rain and she was gone and my voice with her.
Who was she? I don't know. But now I spend my wretched days, roaming the Earth, searching for the woman from the streets of Florence.
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Exactly 100 words
Another Drabble created from the prompt:
Write about someone who becomes mute after they meet the one love of their life.
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Love this Rachel!! It kind of felt metaphorical for that moment when you start editing a story and realize you've lost the narrative voice you intended the story to have! Beautiful!!
What a great 100 word piece! You're really nailing these drabbles! this one was an especially entrancing read
This is electric, Rachel! An ode begging for 1,000 nights and 10,000 words! Absolutely loved it. Drabbles tempt and tickle and leave me wanting more.
Ooh, gorgeously crafted!
This FEELS like a poem.
I'm with Caroline, I'm now so curious about this character and story! Brilliant work, getting us all so invested in just 100 words! The mysterious and thrilling atmosphere is so palpable :)
You're going to have to start writing more follow ups because you get me totally invested and I want to find out what happens next! This was fab, as always.
Oh, who was she indeed? Well done!
Oooooh...jam-packed with lore and world-building this drabble! Well done, chumalum
What a visual dream …..or nightmare. “Ethereal and wraith-like”…..Loved this drabble so much.
I love the sparse and beautiful language and the way it's tied to such a evocative location. Powerful and gorgeous.
Oh wow, I thought it was Ursula and Ariel until I read the prompt! Loved your story!
I love your drabbles!!! One day I'm going to give them a go...