Girl Left In Maine
She Wanted Something From Me
“The cabin in the woods had been abandoned for years, but one night, a candle burned in the window!”
I could hear Aunt Alice as she slowly whispered these words to the eager ears of three eight-year-olds who looked petrified around the campfire.
I was watching through the screen window in the kitchen of her old cabin while I drank a glass of wine and tried to wash dishes. I banged on the wood frame facing the flames trying to get Alice’s attention.
“Alice, we agreed they are too young for this story!”
She looked at me for all of two seconds and continued as though my words were just an inconvenience. “We saw the candle in the window that night as we used to rent another shack across the lake. My late husband and I took a hike in the woods out back the next day, when I found the for-sale sign on the ground. I knew the word around town was that this place was haunted, supposedly by a young woman named Eliza who lived here with her parents and sister in 1960’s!”
I took a sip of wine and patted my forehead with a paper napkin to wipe the sweat. The small fans were not cutting the heat on this hot summer night in the middle of the Maine woods. I had arrived here the day before to clean and open up the cabin. My husband, Mark brought the kids and his aunt today. He announced he could not stay because of work. Even as I watched him drive away, I knew that he was lying.
I pushed open the screen door and tried to distract the kids with a bag of marshmallows they could roast.
“Alice, I’m asking you again to stop.” I whispered to my husband’s aunt. My daughter and her two friends scrambled to pick a stick in the yard to roast their sweet pillowy cubes on.
“Beth honestly you are being overly dramatic! The kids will be fine. It is fun story and besides the ghost of that girl cannot touch us as long as the hatch is locked on the bulkhead doors of the cellar along with those old candles. "
“Yes, but they are young and still learning about the world. I don’t want them to learn about ghosts this way. Many are spirits to be one with nature.”
“Beth what the hell are you talking about? You damn liberals are caught up in your everything is good crap! Ghosts are bad. From what I know about the one in my cabin, she is evil.”
I took a deep breath, then another sip of my wine. I did know more about the spirit in the cabin than Alice would ever know.
When the kids came back with their sticks, my daughter Samantha was the first to ask.
“Auntie Alice tell us more about the girl. Did her parents stay with her? Did she die here?”
Alice continued with her story.
“Well, she was a troublemaker always getting into something. She was loose with the boys. Her parents caught her messing with a boy from town and banished her to the cellar. They believed she was possessed because she refused to attend church. They beat her and encouraged her younger sister to as well. Yet she continued to spew nonsense that she was her own person,” Alice laughed, “a free spirit!” They kept her locked up for many years. They would let her out one hour day!
“Like a prisoner?” Samantha questioned.
“Well, rightfully so,” Alice continued, “She still carried on with hippie stuff and her parents grew weary of her baloney.” Alice looked around at the three sets of eyes staring at her. “They killed her in cellar and locked the doors when they left. When she was found the town did not care as there were many stories that she was a demon.”
I watched as the girls were transfixed on the story. I was already rehearsing in my mind what to say to Samantha’s friends’ parents when they asked why their child was having nightmares.
Alice was in her glory. “So, when your great uncle and I bought this place, it sold for practically nothing. Townspeople warned me about the ghost of this girl, Eliza was her name.”
“Her name was Eliza Stanworth!” I interrupted.
Alice raised her eyebrows while staring straight at me.
“Beth, don’t you think you have had too much to drink? You know you really shouldn’t be drinking in front of the kids.”
“Yes of course Alice, I know that what these kids will be talking about is that I had a glass of wine when they have heard a story about a fiend living down the cellar.”
I walked back into the kitchen slamming the screen door behind me. I checked my phone, nothing not a text or voicemail from Mark.
I could hear Alice carrying on, “Well this Eliza, she continued to hang around after we rebuilt this place. We came here every summer. Each year though, something would happen. There would be things moved around, doors opened. Then one day your uncle came running out of the woods. He had seen her. "
Alice looked over at me as I watched carefully through the screened window. The smell of the campfire was soothing and enticing.
"I warned him to stop as I had found a way to keep the ghost locked in the basement. As long as I burned a candle she would be moved by the flames and drawn to it." Alice's eyes widened." Each time I would take the candle and bring her back to the basement. My husband could not help himself. He let her out one day." Alice moved her face into the campfire, so the flames glowed off her eyes. The girls were now pulling their blankets around their heads. "He was so mesmerized by her apparent beauty; he then went looking for her every day. Until he thought he saw her in the lake and swam out, I guess he lost his strength, as that is where he drowned.”
The kids gasped around the campfire. I came back out and told them it was getting late.
“Time for bed everyone! Don't forget we are going swimming tomorrow." I motioned my hands to move them along.
They all held tightly onto me. I heard whispers, “Will she hurt us?”
I just answered as gently as I could to assure that they would be okay. Rolling my eyes at Alice who did not move an inch to help me get them to bed.
“What country does Sam’s friend come from? You know the Asian one.” Alice started when I came back outside to clean up.
“What Naomi? She comes from America!” I snapped back.
“ What is up with the other child, Harley is it? Boy or a girl?"
I closed my eyes as I have had to deal with years of intolerance from Alice.
“Alice, Harley is transgender and identifies as a girl. She is Samantha’s best friend."
“Jesus Christ, this generation has gone whacky. Just one more question. How did you know Eliza’s last name? I have never mentioned that.”
“I must have heard from the grocery clerk in town yesterday. Stories about Eliza have circulated for years whether they are true or not.” I answered calmly while picking up paper plates and soda bottles.
I left Alice sitting outside. I knew it was pointless to continue. Whether it was the way I cleaned, the food I ate, how I raised my daughter or what I believed, Alice’s comments were never ending.
I had only agreed to take her in when Mark said she had no other family as her parents were gone. She had a sister who died young. Alice and her husband did not have any children, so it was her husband’s nephew and his wife, being me, that had to take care of her. She was demanding and disrespectful. I had begged Mark to move her to an Assisted Living, but he, who was barely around, refused.
The next day at the cabin I woke to Alice’s eyes staring down at me.
“Jesus, Alice!” I screamed.
“Which grocery clerk gave you Eliza’s last name?”
“What?”
“Which clerk? No one around here had her name!”
“I don’t know Alice, the old guy with no teeth, I guess.” I rubbed my eyes. “If no one had her name, then how did you know her name, Alice?”
“It was on the mortgage paperwork!”
I watched her head down the stairs of the cabin. She may be going to verify my story about the clerk or maybe she was going to check the bulkhead as she has every hour of daylight since we have been here.
I got dressed in my bathing suit and went to get the kids breakfast before heading to the lake for swimming as promised. I would deal with Alice later as she did not like the water.
The girls had pretty much forgotten the nightmare tale they were told the night before. We headed to the lake. I was determined to have one beautiful day with my daughter and her friends. The kids were in their glory. The crystal blue waters in Maine were always my favorite even during my darkest hours. When we were done swimming, I told then we would go for ice cream on the ride home.
“Are we going to that lady's house that works with dad, I forget how do you say it? Admina person?" Samantha asked. “He brought me there one time when he had to work late. “
I smiled as I knew my husband was having an affair with his administrative assistant, even before it was confirmed by my eight- year-old daughter. “Yes, honey we will. Surprise daddy!”
“First, I have to take care of something.” I turned to each one for a look of trust.” Promise me you girls will all stay on these towels.” All of them nodded in unison as I turned and headed back to the cabin.
I could see Alice had already found the candles and was burning one in the window. I brought the wax sticks out when I arrived two days earlier to clean. I was curious about her story and when I came across the key located in an old teacup. I went down and opened the bulkhead doors.
At first, I screamed as a couple of mice jumped out, but I continued into the dark hole. I saw the candles and went to grab a couple. As I turned around, I saw her.
She was so beautiful even as a shadow crossed her face. Her hair wisped around her chin. Her eyes looked directly at me as if to speak. I felt a strong connection to Eliza almost immediately.
She wanted something from me, and I was willing to let her take it, to take me. She ran her fingers over my shoulder, down over my back I melted with her touch. I felt her arms wrap around me in an embrace that took my breath. I felt her enter me as she wished. I did not resist. When she was through, we had become one. I felt stronger as Eliza and then as Beth. I would wait for the moment to erase the pain which had been inflicted on both of us.
When I arrived, Alice was waiting. “You went down the cellar, Beth after I asked you not to. You saw her, didn’t you?”
I looked at her calmly as I my eyes focused on the candles. “Yes Alice, I saw her. Let’s see if we can call her back to the basement.”
“You let her out! Honestly Beth I don’t know what Mark sees in you!"
“Let’s go look for her, maybe she came back to cellar after you burnt the candles.” I as Beth calmly stated.
“Well, I guess that is worth a shot. Eliza was not very bright either. I suppose she told you that I was the one who saw coming out of the woods, half naked with a boy in town,” She snorted.
“No, she didn’t mention anything.” I as Eliza smiled as we closed the screen door and headed out back. The smell of pine needles in the summer air was so refreshing. I was finally feeling at peace in the woods, but knew I could not stay.
“Well,” Alice continued. “She was a whore! My family did not need that kind of trouble. She thought she was all that with her long red hair.” Alice sneered as we reached the bulkhead.
“Alice, why don’t you go down to see if she is down there?” I as Beth encouraged as I swung open the heavy red door.
Alice took a couple of steps down. “She doesn’t scare me; I have dealt with this bitch my whole life.
I as Eliza smiled as I watched Alice step down slowly. She had not taken a light with her, but that was okay as it was her turn to live in the darkness. When she reached the bottom and turned around.
“My dear sister how does it feel?”
“What?” Alice's voice did start to panic as my hair color blended to my auburn shade. Beth's features became mine. My eyes darted in her direction.
“I would watch you close these very same doors every time when you knew our parents were going to beat me. I would see your grin. Now you can see my smile little sister.”
I swung the first bulkhead door to close. I blended back to Beth. "This door will shut to bury all of your negative abusive narrative." I as Beth could hear the Alice screams of “Stupid bitch!” while I closed the second door and fastened the lock.
I went back in the cabin and packed all our belongings after I called for the girls to get into to car. I went back into the old cabin as my new self, Elizabeth, and looked around as candle burned in the window. I knocked it over as the prisoner downstairs pounded and screamed. The flames started to ignite the room.
“Aunt Alice is going to stay here a few more days!" I told the girls as I started the car, "Who is ready for ice cream? Then we are going to surprise Daddy at his administrative assistant’s house!” Lots of cheers came from the back seat as we pulled out of the drive. The orange glow of the past was in the rearview mirror.
About the Creator
C. H. Richard
My passion is and has always been writing. I am particularly drawn to writing fiction that has relatable storylines which hopefully keep readers engaged
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Comments (13)
such an amazing writer
Nice
Really well constructed, and a very spooky take for Unreliable Narrator. Good luck in the challenge 🙏😁
I could have sworn I'd already read this one and left a comment, how odd!
Saw this on the G-alphabet day! didn't see the ending coming!
My kind of story! Great job!
Spooky story with a twisted ending
This was one of my favorite challenges though my story didn’t get much love. I really enjoyed yours very good tale
Lots of grammar and punctuation mistakes. But the story is interesting and the visualization is very well done! I was a bit confused when Eliza and Beth became one, and thought it was a sexual interaction instead of a spiritual merge. Maybe that was what you were going for? Might I suggest that instead of saying "Eliza and I" or "Beth and I" , just say "We"? Besides that, very good story. Keep up the good work!
Great story, creepy and unpredictable!
Awesome!!! Outstanding story!!💖💕
This is great. Well done.
Really enjoyed this. Great story