Ever so slowly
Just here and there
Her plan had unfolded ever so slowly.
Unsure if it would falter and then spectacularly combust.
Or would her dreams be realised?
A plan that, if executed flawlessly, had the potential to succeed.
She was determined.
It was time to relearn her authentic voice. This was her time for truth.
This plan of hers was to leave with a sound mind. Her sanity was unequivocal.
She would not let him defeat her.
It would become as she had proclaimed and laid down.
Over the years, she had taken and saved.
She completed her daily chores and the shopping once a week.
Then, on her return, he ordered her to check the shopping list. His unyielding degrading ritual to ensure that there had been no inclusion of superfluous items bought for her fancy.
Bit by bit. Here and there, she syphoned and saved.
Now. The time was here.
She had saved for her cash-purchased car. Nothing was left in her wake, beyond freedom.
She had defeated her hatred.
He would remain unaware of her plan.
Her 'in-plain-sight money heist’ was carried out with extended stealth and foresight; carefully executed over 45 years.
Unbeknown to him.
Accolades for her, the woman unseen.
About the Creator
Pauline Fountain
Writing and photography provide a creative outlet to reflect with meaning on my life.
My mental health? Bipolar 1 (Rapid Cycling), Complex PTSD and Functional Neurological Disorder.
My son’s gentle wisdom furnishes me with the gift of hope.
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This was phenomenal. I can't believe how well this was written, how did you plan this? Where did you find the words? The inspiration? Almost all the words you used were soft, and it gave this writing a completely unique voice. It felt like the person who was speaking was living outside themselves, almost like personified dissociation but controlled and directed. I was scrolling for more, now I am just speechless. I am suppose to be doing my workout, but my goodness 😲
Good work
Powerful. And terse - no word is wasted.
Hi, please readout my stories for sporting me I will be very thankful to you
this reminds me so much of the style of Sylvia Plath. the words and structure have so much depth and make me really FEEL something!❤️
Thoughts are amazing
Congratulations on Top Story!! 🤗❤️❤️
Congrats on Top story Pauline. Well deserved. Sorry I only get one vote. 🥰
It took her time but she finally did it. This is very encouraging for women to take charge of their tough situations.
Wow!!! This was amazing!
Whoaaaaa and all 5 a's necessary! That was amazing, I love the way the plot carried along. Excellent!
Congratulations on Top Story!!
Congratulations on your Top Story, just after I shared in Raise Your Voice , sure that had nothing to do with it 😁
Oh my word...all those years. It's so tragic yet I'm thrilled she persevered and got away. What a fantastic read, well done :)
Beautiful, bold & brilliant!!! Loved it!!!❤️❤️💕
A wonderfully drawn tale of justified deception, and she succeeded and deserved what she got.
Very clever and meaningful story, Pauline! I'm so glad she got away 🥹
In an age where sound bytes exceed the attention spans of many, that's truly devotion to a cause.
Oh I hope she finds her light far away from that troll, excellent work
I'm so glad she got away!
A well done story. 💕
Oooo, I love heists like this! She deserved it so much! Happy for her!
👍😊✨Love this mini narrative. Reminds me a little of a book I read once by Stephen King.
Good story.
Wonderful and uplifting!! 💓