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The Rape Culture
‘The Rape Culture’ might sound exaggerated but yes that's what is happening in India. You just open any newspaper or any social media and you get news in front of you about rape that happened yesterday, the day before yesterday, or any kind of data that blows your mind and makes you numb.
By sagar detheabout a year ago in Critique
Autumn is Coming!
Even though I live in the Deep South in the state of Louisiana now I still can picture myself standing in a very wooded lot with a lot of trees changing their color from green to yellow to red and orange. I can picture myself raking leaves and yes jumping in them once the pile is big enough usually doing this fun activity at least a few times before setting to work raking them all up and either raking them into the creek or into the woods to decay and bring forth new growth one way or another. Autumn is the season of cooler temperatures, cozy fires in the fireplace and reading a good book or making a craft of some kind. It is also season to give thanks for what you have and to look up to the Lord and tell him.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Ode to the Working Man/Woman
An ode to the working man and women. We all work in some ways, whether it be someone like the image working in a workshop with wood to someone working in computer or medical lab, or a teacher, nurse, writer or homemaker. We all work using all our specific and special talents. Whether working with wood, codes, medications/specimens, children, patients or pen and paper and a little of everything above we are all workers.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
The Writing Teacher Two
First, I do not think this will be a top story. It is just something that I want to share that kind of goes along with the previous essay. The many writing teachers that I have had throughout my education from elementary to middle school and high school clear through college and graduate school seemed always to remind us that good writing starts off with the perfect sentence then moving on to the perfect paragraph to the perfect first paper.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Winnie
tiddle, diddle um a song he sings many times just for fun too. (Winnie the Pooh is one of favorite characters ever since early elementary school. Pooh makes you think about things in a different way. Line one is a little song he sings while he 'exercises' or just 'sitting and thinking' or as Line three reads just for fun. Learning and helping is the thing to do is what I got and get every time I read 'Winnie the Pooh', 'The House at Pooh Corner' and the poetry books 'When We Were Young' and 'Now We Are Six'.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Doors
doors side by side which one open or close In or out please. (Not sure on this one. I saw this picture of two doors side by side and wondered which side do people enter or leave or going in and out. What happens when a child goes out one side and the other side and forgets to close the door but sees that the one side is closed and thinks they shut it when they didn't. Two doors side by side could be confusing at times. Maybe that is why I am not too sure of this one.) Please comment.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Lawn Mower
The long and short of cutting grass whether gas or electric. (Anyone who has mowed lawns as a living or as a summer job will understand this little haiku. Line one being the grass of many lengths. Line two meaning the grass in itself and Line three if one had a gas or electric powered mower. I was a person who had seven customers pretty much over many years of this having this profession unofficially for a called myself a groundskeeper.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
A Small Kindness
He did it again always taking up our trash Why does he do it? (Just like the little essay I wrote I think this haiku fits in with the newest contest. Line one my nephew noticing the garbage taken up and the act of and he wonders why in line three.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
A Dog's Bark
Woof, growl, woof, woof Will it be food, water or bite the stranger. (Just a fun little haiku that I thought of when the dogs starting barking when the school bus came down the road. Line one the sounds of a dog, line two the possible reasons for a dog's bark and line three just a little humor for I am a dog person from way back.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
