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parents rules loyalty child love (This is my first 'tautogram'. I have never written one before.)
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Just look at me.
"Just look at me. I wish I remembered what happened to me." I was sitting on a blanket with my child and all of a sudden a big something came after me. "I kind of remember sharp teeth, but who did the teeth belong to I wondered. While looking around I saw my kid who seemed to have tears running down her face and all I could not help her. What was happening to me and the sharp teeth. They did hurt, but I knew that my kid well I hoped would start yelling just a little louder. Mommy help!
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Just look at me 2
Mommy came a running out of the house and yelled at the thing that had me with its' teeth. The thing dropped me right then and I saw that my leg seemed to have a hole, and I felt funny a few other places too. The mommy and my kid were now going into the house and the mommy was getting ready to do something. I hope whatever doesn't hurt. My kid started to smile a little and mommy said "Mr. Bear should be good as new in a few days and we will check his hurts in a bit."
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Adorable
Look at the baby asleep so peacefully dreaming of what.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Wyoming
Here is my critique on 'Wyoming' the third installment of the Wagons West series by Dana Fuller Ross. This part of the series picks up when the wagon train is just about to enter the Rocky Mountains right in time for the winter season. Whip, Cathy, and all the others will have to learn how to survive the season and how to deal when one feels 'cabin fever' along with meeting a few new people joining the train. There is on woman who can see the future at times, as well as two that come up from California way. There are various relationships that will see differences during this winter season in a place named Little Valley. The train is very close to their objective now.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Woman and Cat
Here I lie naked beside my cat. The cat is my protector of all things including myself. The cat never sleeps while I sleep. Sometimes I think what does that cat think about during the night while he is on watch. So much to ponder about when one has a pet who loves you so much that they will do anything for you. The cat never flinches through the night for I have awakened once or twice, but never moved for I did not want to disturb him and his duty to me at night he shows his love too.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Where Are We Going?!
"Where do you think you're taking me?" he said. Just want to share that my arm is really hurting. "Can you hear me?" "I do not think this adult can understand me." I know I was out in the yard a long time, and I hope you are taking me back to my kid. I really miss him. Bear and adult kept walking and walking. Bear looked around and around no kid yet. The adult said something, and my kid came out of the house and a big smile was on his face so big that I smiled at him.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Reevaluating Social Norms: From Workaholism to Fast Fashion
Workaholism, characterized by an excessive and uncontrollable need to work, has become a socially endorsed behavior in many modern societies, particularly in Western cultures. This phenomenon is often justified by the idea that hard work leads to success and prosperity. However, an increasing body of evidence suggests that the culture of workaholism has significant negative implications for individuals' health and societal well-being. Studies have shown that chronic overworking can lead to physical ailments such as hypertension and heart disease, as well as mental health issues like anxiety and depression. Therefore, it is crucial to reevaluate the merit of workaholism as a social norm and consider more balanced approaches to work-life integration.
By Benefitabout a year ago in Critique
Why me?! 2
Yes, I am still here on this post. Wait, I hear a car. I try to turn my head, but I can't for I am stuffed. I hear voices and it is my kid. He sees me and he says he is sorry for leaving so abruptly. He said he had to go to the dentist for a checkup and he smiles and says, "No cavities!" My mom was in a rush, and I didn't have time to untie you for I could have used you at the dentists' office. He untied me, hugged me and went in the house.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Why me?
Oh! why me. Why is it always me that gets into these kinds of predicaments. Well, I guess I better share how I got here. I was picked up my kid and he said, "I have a game to play." We ran around for a while he said a few lines and Bang, bang his toy gun went off. The next thing he was tying me to this post and here I am. I wish he would hurry back, but he and his mom jumped in the care and off they went. Hope they get here soon I'm getting stiff.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Hey, Look At Me!
Betcha, you are thinking why am I hanging here on this line by my ears. Well, I am going to tell you in a very short story. This afternoon I was with my kid, and we went for a walk. It was a beautiful day, so he decided to walk down his mothers' garden path, when he saw that she was watering her vegetables. Wouldn't you know it my kid did not see the puddle in the middle of path and slipped and down we went. His mom saw, laughed and hosed us off and hung me out to dry.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Sitting Bear 3
It's me again. I'm going to finish my tale. Me and my boy walked to this small lake to go fishing, then he forgot his lunch, but he did come back, he ate and shared with me, then he caught a fish and smiled a lot. He put the big fish in something to keep it and he picked me up and we went home. He shared his fishing trip with his mom who cleaned the fish and said this would be great for dinner tonight. My boy was so proud and I could tell so was his mom now.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique