Tortured, Undercover digs too deep for Freddy,
As he slips under Mr. White’s, no
Larry’s protection,
Knowing the diamond heist was always going to fail.
Larry comforts him,
Sticking his neck out for him,
Holds him as he bleeds out and even gets shot for him,
A damn American tragedy.
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Oh this was so tragic! Excellent review Merly!
Brilliant!
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