When you finally go back to your old home, you find it wasn't the old home you missed but your childhood.
JBaz Twisted Quote Unofficial Challenge-
When love was dropped and shattered
And my poor heart lost to me
I returned, bruised and battered
To where my home used to be
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I found but shards and slivers
Of the child I used to be.
He whines and shits and shivers
And is of no use to me!
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Quote citation: ~Sam Ewing
Yeah, I went all sicko. I also decided to try a new poetic form and came up with an odd one. It's an Irish form, called "Ae Freislighe". So, I says to me self, "I've got Irish blood in me veins, so..." Here's the structure, as I understand it:
Quatrain stanzas of 7 syllables per line.
The last 3 syllabyes of lines 1 and 3 rhyme. (xxa)
The last 2 sylllables of lines 2 and 4 rhyme. (xa)
The number of stanzas can apparently be anywhere from 1 to infinity.
I don't know how badly I've butchered it, but I'm sure my ancestors are rolling in their graves.
Here's the resource I found:
And here's a link to the Challenge (Thanks, JBaz):
Thanks for reading!
About the Creator
Dana Crandell
Dad, Stepdad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.
Poet, Writer, Editor, Photographer, Artist and Tech/Internet nerd.
My first published poetry collection: Life, Love & Ludicrosity
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Comments (10)
Wow, this is poignant and sharp. Well done, great entry!
this was something else! such a great take on the quote and challenge!
I'm not judging structure but imagination and uniqueness. I am not displeased with this in fact I am tickled pink. Thankyou so much for getting this in
Very interesting form! As far as I can tell you did a great job with it! And you built off the quote very cleverly
I love poems where the title tells us as much as the poem. The title drew me in! So true, too. Nostalgia enraptures us, but often keeps us from growing.
I like the form you have chosen, it really flows. I've never heard of Ae Freislighe before, it's good to know about it!
LOL! Oh dear. That was funny! And yes, the adult wants something different. Naïveté!
This is hilarious. Also, I get it. When I went home last summer, I went to visit my grandparents house (now, my uncle's). I spent a great deal of time there growing up. Nan used to babysit us and our cousins. I expected to be overcome with nostalgic emotion, but the house is so different that all I felt was disappointment that it wasn't the same.
Hahahahahaha this was so funny and you executed this form so brilliantly!
Cool work Dana. I’ll have to check out his challenge! 😃