Vulnerable
A Five-Line Sensory Poem
Photo by Jakayla Toney on Unsplash
I am scalded. The water burns away the nightmares,
And coriolis pulls them, whistling, through the drain
I am soothed. The steam reeks of shampoo and used towels
My tongue takes in bitterness dripping beyond the eyes
I am shocked. My naked body steps out, expecting judgment in the mirror.
About the Creator
Daniel J. Heck
Poet, journaler, short fiction composer, interactive story writer, board game designer. I believe in the power of multiple creative voices within one person, and of variety as the spice of life!
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
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Comments (7)
Fantastic job!!!
Congrats on top story I pray to get there one day
Congrats on Top Story, this poem is well done and captivating :)
This is an amazing poem and response to the challenge. Congratulations on the Top Story, too.
You made me believe that I was the person this poem was speaking of. I really felt as though I was in the shower and my nightmares were being pulled through the drain. This was really really good.
Gorgeous work!
Congratulations! Beautiful poem