Underneath The Stars…
This piece was inspired by the Beautiful Classic from Mariah Carey💖🩵✨Summer Writing Challenge Extravaganza❗
One summer night,
We Ran Away…🌟
In a world of our own,
Just for a while…
We scampered,
Beneath the luminaries,
Of the atmosphere…
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Disseminating in the Grass
Wrapped in your
Compassion,
I could feel
A thin Breeze…
🍃
I felt your Heartbeat,
And I heard the wind that whispered
Beneath the Trees 🍃Chanting:
(Lovely, Lovely
Fantasy…
Hold me precisely,
And Lay with me…
Smolder my Heart
With all of your Love,
Give me Sweet Empathy like Heaven,
Let it Rain From above)
I opened my eyes and,
The whispers stopped,
And Just Like a Magnet 🧲
Our Hearts Clung To Together❤️
Underneath The Stars💖
For the main James & Oneg Summer Writing Challenge Extravaganza…⬇️
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HandsomelouiiThePoet (Lonzo ward)
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Comments (34)
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Beautifully emotional poem Lonzo! 💜
great one,beautifully peom
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Beautiful love poem
Congrats on this, well deserves it!
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Beautiful poem, Lonzo - 'And I heard the wind that whispered Beneath the Trees 🍃Chanting:Lovely, Lovely Fantasy… Hold me precisely, And Lay with me…' You really captured the melody. Congrats on Top Story!
Beautiful & loved this!!! Congratulations on Top Story!!!❤️❤️💕
Beautiful words, Lonzo! What a lovely and romantic scene you created! Also a huge Mariah fan💞👏🏽👏🏽💞Congrats on top story!
I loved this poem
Hey you! Congrats on the TS
I love Mariah! Lamb 4 Life. I loved your poem too. Especially: “We scampered, Beneath the luminaries, Of the atmosphere… Disseminating in the Grass” That’s such an interesting word choice to me as a professional astrologer… because the Moon is known as a luminary, and a Disseminating Moon is one of the lunar phases. Nothing is sweeter than a night under the stars. ✨ Congrats on your Top Story! 🥂
Beautiful as ALWAYS Lonzo!
This is lovely, Lonzo! I just finished rewatching Aladdin and this made me think of the magic carpet ride: "One summer night, We Ran Away… In a world of our own," I think I just have the musical on my mind ☺️ but this was gorgeous! Congrats on Top Story! 🤗❤️
Beautiful! I enjoyed every line. Congrats 🎉
Oh this was so romantic and wonderful! Awesomeeee poem for this challenge!
Beautiful as always Lonzo. Ah, summer love, wonderful.
So lovely. Well written and touching. 😊💙👍
Amazing, great use of imagination :)
Fantastic and you chose a classic song my friend.
Love this! It was so easy to visualize this poem, well done!
Nice work Lonzo! 👏☺️😎
Great one! This was so good.
Great job!