Together for Eternity
An epistolary poem from the battlefield
My dearest love, my heart’s desire,
I write to you from fields of fire,
Where muskets roar and cannons boom,
And every day is filled with gloom.
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These days are dark, and wet, and cold,
And death is always near, I’m told,
Yet through it all, my thoughts of you,
Give me strength to see this through.
⚔
I miss your kiss and warm embrace,
And the way a smile lights up your face,
But, for now, my heart finds peace,
In cherished thoughts and memories.
⚔
My brothers here, they stand in faith,
That soon this war will run its race,
For in our hearts, we know it well,
The end will come, and peace prevail.
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The sun will set upon this war,
And peace and love will soon restore,
Our homes and lives and families --
A future that was meant to be.
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Until that day, my dearest love,
Please keep me close, and pray above,
For in your heart, I find my strength,
And hope to carry me the length.
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But should I answer heaven’s bugle call,
And on these blood-stained fields I fall,
Weep not for me with heavy heart,
Our love not even death can part.
⚔
Should I befall a soldier’s fate,
I’ll wait for you at Heaven’s gate,
And there, alas, we’ll finally be,
Together for eternity.
⚔
With love always,
Robert
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Comments (20)
✒️Magnificent!👏🏽
Did you write this for me? I feel like you wrote this for me
Damn, this is truly musical and gorgeous to read. I applaud you on both the atmosphere you have created in this piece, but also the emotional weight of history in the verses. Fantastic.
Magnificent poem! Definitely Top shelf RM. I don’t know how I missed this, but Paul has come to the rescue. I have spent my entire life enamored by the 19th century. A favorite collection is a book of letters, “Why We Fought”. Your poem is nostalgic, sincere, and spot on to the time. The question unanswered for me is…. Why did my Great Great grandfather in Ga., newly married, opposed to slavery, leave his bride and go to war knowing that only 50% would return?
This was a stellar entry. Not sure why it didn’t place 🤔. Very vivid and sincere. I loved the line, “should I befall a soldier’s fate, I’ll wait for you at heaven’s gate.” Bravo, my friend!
Whelmingly beautiful.
Oh my goodness. This piece brought some tears to my eyes. Someone needs to turn it into a movie. It's beautiful and I can easily see this as being something honestly written from a soldier's POV. 💕
Terrific job on writing this 🎉🥰😍 Thank you for sharing this Awesome Piece, Paul 😉💯
Outstanding, Rob! I can see the soldier writing this!
Oh how beautiful…. I really loved your choices for the rhyme and meter, made this feel like it could be a hymn almost!
A little hopeful, yet a little sad. Wonderful poem.
This is pure magic. I loved the flow of this and that final verse was just perfect.
“But should I answer heaven’s bugle call.” What a shift! And some amazing imagery. Way to transport the reader into the setting! 👍
Don't know how I missed this one, but this was stunning, Rob! So passionate, romantic, so full of detail, but with such beautiful flow! Well done on this one, Rob!
RM ~ So sorry to be such a noodge today! But, this one brought out so much in me ~ That's the wonder of interacting with the power of the pen - we never know how our readers might relate - but, relate we do, indeed on our 'Special Dial Backs' - * May I take a moment to share what you popped out of me; sorry to be so soppy. While on Viet Nam deployment we had what was called a 'Short-Timers-Calendar' (If you know any Boomers they may relate as well) - A huge billboard of a woman hanging on our doors and each day we would pull a piece of dress off - until we got to our 'Heart' again - I never left mine again 'The Last Valentine' was written to her. Thank you for that reach back - I hope knowing that brings you a nice feeling! IOU-1 Jay
Our love not even death can part. I loved that line so much! Your Epistolary was awesome!
Incredibly written with so much emotion…. I’m speechless. 🤯💕
A terrific take on the challenge! 🙌😊
I like that your rhyme scheme (AABB) is consistent between both pieces that I've read of yours. I prefer the choice, stylisticly, more in "Through the Eyes of a Child"; the use there set the tone and pace effortlessly. However in this instance, I can see rhymn's value. It creates a rhythmn that made me think of a march. Very fitting. I can also say that the choice here is smart because of who the letter/poem is written to. It's how we talk to our loved ones. We try and make difficult situations lighter but say what we truly mean at the same time. As a whole this was again a wonderful read. Thanks for taking the time to read my writing as well!
Beautiful, thank you