This Particular Forever
A Reversal of Sorts
Perhaps the moments and years in which you never feel fully present
Are in fact the moments and years which you never fully leave -
And a part of you always lives on there,
In the dappled late-spring light, which fights to get past the filter of your eyes, and
At the quiet night's bus stop, one away from the route's snowy terminus, and
On the carpet floor of your new old church
Wondering, wandering in place
(like a weaned child with its mother?)
With a quiet note sostenuto through all the dissociating,
and resonating on
In a little corner
of every particle
of your entire being
Until this particular forever
ends.
About the Creator
Gabriel Huizenga
Twas for love of words that I first joined this site:
Poetry, especially, and dear short stories too;
For to live one's best is to read, and to write!
So find me in words here, and I'll find you 💙
Thanks for stopping by! :)
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Comments (22)
I like the staccato effect here...that forever snow comes in stops and starts. A particular forever. A brilliant top story worthy poem.
The visual flow of this poem sustains the tone and theme. Very effective
Subscribed!! Beautiful work
Very good content, I really liked your article, can you subscribe to my channel as I have subscribed to your channel ?
The quirky minds of poets and how they arrive at the words is a story within itself. This brings back memories of snowy lifestyle.
“ Until this particular forever ends.” Magnificent!
"And a part of you always lives on there" I felt that line so deeply. Wonderfully penned :)
very good poem, I love the image descriptions.
Beautiful Words, thankyou for sharing and congratulations on Top Story xx
I love your point
Well, I'll be thinking about those first two lines for a while. Really, I read through this several times. You've captured such a cool concept! Remarkable poem, congrats on Top Story!
Back to say congrats! This was an excellent piece
Lol. I find myself siding with DK rather than Dr Gabriel. lol. HE HAS YOUR NAME. Anyway, my friend. Hope the speeches are going well and all that and you are helping to teach young minds. I am not surprised really at all that this made its way to Top Storydom. Congrats on that. I sitll love that you used that line as a title. So chinstroky!
Nice
Absolutely captivating! The opening lines are so exquisitely wrought I had a very hard time moving on from them, but the rest of the piece was equally stunning. Beautifully wrought, Gabriel!
Well-wrought! You might also have titled this "Quantum Metaphysics".
Shaun and everyone else went and stole my comments. the thieves! But, this was all of the below and more. You know I am very much in awe of your writing, especially when it comes to poetry. You have such elegance and command of flow. But, that aside, this was sublime. I love the almost conversational style, but how you still elevate it. Well done, sir!
Sublime, and like that note, I think it will linger in my mind
I couldn’t think of a more poetic and stunning and HOPEFUL way to describe dissociation. Absolutely beautiful, Gabe! I’ll be stuck in time just thinking about this piece
Ethereal and lovely, Gabriel. I agree with Lamar. Your poetry is always sensational.
Those first two lines tell a story on their own. Sensational work!!!
This is going to haunt me and I am not sure why...