The Virus I Carry
A villanelle of regrets
Discontent infects, a virulent flu
No seeming cure for this evolving strain
In your soul, my resentment breeds anew
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Pure nonsense knocks my composure askew
No cage can my impatience contain
Discontent infects, a virulent flu
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I can’t feel your misery coming through
Sarcasm has become my Novocain
In your soul, my resentment breeds anew
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Pustules of exasperation accrue
Source of unused vaccine along my vein
Discontent infects, a virulent flu
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In your voice, my ire cuts through
Have I branded you with the mark of Caine?
In your soul, my resentment breeds anew
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Can I heal us both before payment comes due?
Or choked our love with a cancerous chain?
Discontent infects, a virulent flu
In your soul, my resentment breeds anew
About the Creator
Sean A.
A happy guy that tends to write a little cynically. Just my way of dealing with the world outside my joyous little bubble.
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If You Love Me, You'll Do It
I met Jason when I was five years old. I could say that I loved him from the moment I saw him. He was so handsome to me and I felt in awe by his presence. When they introduced him as the new kid in school, I wanted to be his friend right away. I remember it like it was yesterday. I remember his smile and how he didn't seem shy. He appeared confident and ready to learn. I waved at him and said "hello," before anyone else could even say a word. He sat next to me, and I asked him if he wanted to be friends. He looked so happy as he said, "Yes!"
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An excellent Villanell, Sean. I especially love this part : "In your voice, my ire cuts through Have I branded you with the mark of Caine? in your soul, my resentment breeds anew" Congratulations on your win!🥳👏
Well deserved placing in the challenge!👏
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Potent poem! I’ve never attempted a Villanelle. Very impressive. I especially like: “In your voice, my ire cuts through Have I branded you with the mark of Caine? In your soul, my resentment breeds anew”🤗
Sarcasm has become my Novocain - I will never write a line this good 👍
I can not even fathom writing a villanelle, especially one this good.
Oh, this villanelle is so well crafted and painfully honest! The form itself mirrors the cyclical, inescapable nature of resentment in a relationship, those refrains coming back around like arguments that never quite resolve.
"Sarcasm has become my Novocain" That line was so clever! Loved your poem!
Loved the theme you went with. And the metaphors are working soooo well!
Strong stuff, Sean! I predict that someone will have the words "Sarcasm has become my Novocain" tattooed onto his, her or their body six to eight weeks after reading this poem.
Well-wrought! It is strange, is it not, how discontent sets into us, where difficult times sometimes rouse and comfort sometimes sinks us into ennui? A mystery still to me.
An excellent villanelle, and it packs an emotional punch. Great entry, Sean!
Excellent!
Oh this is great, if very sad. Live the rhymes and those repeated lines are stirring to say the least! Powerful and relatable entry. Sean!