The Perfect Challenge
Poem and Challenge
I have a challenge for y'all.
The reward is I will pick my favorite poems from this challenge to include in my course as inspiration for those who are learning how to write poetry: that means you will have more likes, comments, and views on that poetry (that of course, is if it's okay with you if I use your poetry as an example, totally fine if not.)
The Challenge is as follows;
Write a poem about the perfect day, or morning or evening, or perfect whatever.
Include your senses, such as sight, smell, and taste.
Use words that describe the scene so we can experience the day as you would want to experience it.
Please link your poem below. Here is mine.
I awake to my husband, arm around me
my baby sleeping, nestled close
the weather is dark, clouds rolling in
the rain, hitting the ground forcefully
*
the warmth of the bed keeps me safe
I bury my nose in my daughter's embrace
my husband whispers "i love you"
his voice sleepy, and deep
I finally untangle from my family
the cat follows me to the kitchen
rubbing gently on my legs
*
the windows are open
I see all the rain
the smell of petrichor and coffee
As I sit at the table
and thank God that this is the start of my day
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Jazzy
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Head of the Jazzy Writers Association (JWA) in partnership with the Vocal HWA chapter.
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Comments (40)
I was wondering, will this challenge have a winner?
Well, I completely missed this one! Oh, well, I'll enjoy reading!
Here is mine! https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/fall-colors%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Do I still have time for this one?
Wow. This is just so COZY! I love days that start like that! Beautiful <3
Hey Jazzy, When is this challenge over?
Here’s mine. ☀️ https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/my-divine-day%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
This is mine. Gave me the opportunity to return to my holiday which can never be a bad thing. Thanks for the challenge! https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/savour-the-dawn%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Here's my offering - kind of. brief and embedded. I may come back for more. https://shopping-feedback.today/fiction/the-offering-l8hd0gqu%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
I wish I had the talent for this challenge. There are some wonderfully beautiful poems written because of this challenge. Well done
What a great idea and opportunity to support other creators. Well-done on creating a course for writers to learn poetry.
I absolutely love this challenge idea (and also your poem, it feels soft and loving) - I couldn't resist joining in; https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/the-moments-between-mg1ny0eho%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Honest to the universe I thought I commented on this bit can't find it anywhere, so I guess not! Loved your poem and the positivity of it. Very beautifully written 🤍 Here is my attempt: https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/the-perfect-storm-mz1ww05fn%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Here you go! My official entry to your challenge, Jazzy! It was a lot of fun, thank you! https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/suddenly-sunday-comes%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
I forgot to come back here and add my link! Thanks so much for the inspiration :) https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/the-in-between-vv18y0rmc%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Beautiful poem and a great idea for a mini-challenge. Classic but original. I may post my Golden Calf as the perfect metal. https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/golden-calf-9mde0ia1%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Wonderful challenge and I loved your sample poem! You paint the scene so well and convey such warmth and contentment in each verse.
I said I would write one but then remembered this one I wrote for a previous vocal challenge, and I think it has the sentiments I want to convey (don't know if you're taking more than one poem, but if I can do only 1, i'd say this one). This is kind of free verse with some rhyming (i need to learn how to write free verse without accidentally rhyming). https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/the-best-distraction-3cla0waw%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Your poem was wonderful and so sentimental. What a wonderful life 💙Anneliese Thank you so much for the interesting challenge! Pernoste and I put this poem together that maybe you will like, based on something I wrote a few years ago. https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/a-perfect-morning-qi1740fyo%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
Awww, your poem was absolutes wonderful! I'll post here in the comments if I'm able to write something new but I do have this poem that seem to fit the criteria: https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/rainy-day-in-the-car?via=dharrsheena
This is such a great challenge. Got peace from Kayleigh Fraser's; got warmth from yours. I'm going to give it a go!
https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/perfect-repetition%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E Wrote the first verse last night and finished this morning ❤️🕊️✨ Thank you so much for the inspiration!
Love this! I'm gonna have to try this... :D
Such a cool challenge, Jazzy! I like your poem a lot as well! Not sure if I will have the time to write something, but I may have a future poem that works for it. In the meantime, what about these three candidates: - https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/last-night-d32a030u1q%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E - https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/poetry-a-particle-of-you-une-parcelle-de-toi%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E - https://shopping-feedback.today/poets/3-a-m-ht2slf0an1%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E If you don't think they fit, don't worry about it. But if you do choose something, please link to my website.
Absolutely gorgeous poem Jazzy