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The Haunting of Car 17 - 50 Years Later

Part Two - Collaboration with KelliđŸŒč

By Mother CombsPublished 10 months ago ‱ Updated 10 months ago ‱ 1 min read
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Part One by Kelli

Part Two:

Now, for fifty very long years

The wrecked train has stood

A testament of phantom fears

To this ghostly brotherhood

For all who are willing to pass

Are soon assimilated within

The more souls to amass

By the demonic conductor’s vermin

As they roam the haunted aisles

Fooling the innocent with a grin

For there’s evil behind their smiles

As they attempt to lure you in

Each new commissioner of the railways

Needing to save the line's reputation

Trying to cleanup in different ways

Finally, send out a word of communication

Begging for anyone with enlightenment

With matters of the supernatural

Knowing they needed to make atonement

To fight this disaster most unnatural

After they sent out their word

Asking for any exorcist’s aid

The wraiths’ anger was even more spurred

Their wails now never do fade

Stirring up all of Hell’s rage

They build their very resistance

For tearing down death’s cage

To cleave to their existence

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Mother Combs

Come near, sit a spell, and listen to tales of old as I sit and rock by my fire. I'll serve you some cocoa and cookies as I tell you of the time long gone by when your Greats-greats once lived.

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  • Randy Wayne Jellison-Knock10 months ago

    What happened with cars 1-16 & any that might have followed 17--not to mention the engine/locomotive &/or coal cars? Is the locus of the evil in car 17 or with the engineer, or are there two loci? These are things we must know lest the story go off the tracks, lol.

  • Marie381Uk 10 months ago

    Brilliant your the best â­ïžđŸ˜Šâ­ïž

  • Ooo! So spooky! And lightning in the skies over these horrors. I'll do my best to take them out but I make no guarantees. ⚡💙⚡

  • Oh my, what more can be done? Going to read part 3 now!

  • Caroline Craven10 months ago

    Really enjoying these collaborations between you and Kelli.

  • Fantastic, Sharon.....

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