The Haunting of Car 17 - 50 Years Later
Part Two - Collaboration with Kelliđč

Part One by Kelli
Part Two:
Now, for fifty very long years
The wrecked train has stood
A testament of phantom fears
To this ghostly brotherhood
For all who are willing to pass
Are soon assimilated within
The more souls to amass
By the demonic conductorâs vermin
As they roam the haunted aisles
Fooling the innocent with a grin
For thereâs evil behind their smiles
As they attempt to lure you in
Each new commissioner of the railways
Needing to save the line's reputation
Trying to cleanup in different ways
Finally, send out a word of communication
Begging for anyone with enlightenment
With matters of the supernatural
Knowing they needed to make atonement
To fight this disaster most unnatural
After they sent out their word
Asking for any exorcistâs aid
The wraithsâ anger was even more spurred
Their wails now never do fade
Stirring up all of Hellâs rage
They build their very resistance
For tearing down deathâs cage
To cleave to their existence
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Comments (6)
What happened with cars 1-16 & any that might have followed 17--not to mention the engine/locomotive &/or coal cars? Is the locus of the evil in car 17 or with the engineer, or are there two loci? These are things we must know lest the story go off the tracks, lol.
Brilliant your the best âïžđâïž
Ooo! So spooky! And lightning in the skies over these horrors. I'll do my best to take them out but I make no guarantees. âĄđâĄ
Oh my, what more can be done? Going to read part 3 now!
Really enjoying these collaborations between you and Kelli.
Fantastic, Sharon.....