Space was what we'd wanted - lots of room to grow
In anticipation of a dozen kids in tow.
Love brought its first miracle and gifted you the glow.
Eviscerated, here I stand, in this half-finished shell.
No joy lives here. God took you both and left me here, in Hell.
Cursed and cursing, no one hears the blasphemies I yell.
Echoes fade. I strike the match, no story left to tell.
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Dana Crandell
Dad, Stepdad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.
Poet, Writer, Editor, Photographer, Artist
My poetry collection: Life, Love & Ludicrosity
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Hard-hitting, and sobering. I really like the way the second half contrasts with the first Dana. The change in rhyme matches the change in tone form hopeful to hopeless.
Hits hard! Good luck in the challenge ☺
This is so powerfully devastating! Incredible work, Dana! Picking myself up off the floor after this
This is so poignantly and profoundly filled with grief and lingering sadness. It's truly heartbreaking in its intensity. Beautiful though sad acrostic poem.
Omgggg, this was soooo saddddd!!! Though poignant, it was so beautifully written! I loved it!
Felt the pain in this one.😢 Well done ❤️
Dana... what did you do??? The story you tell through this acrostic is so heartbreaking and tense... masterfully done!!
Strong work, nice!
Well-wrought! Silence can punctuate both intense agony and ecstasy, and, as your poem shows, not always necessarily in that order.
I could feel you setting this up and it was, truly, a fall.
Oh wow. That is packed with emotion. Well done, my friend.
Truly a thought provoking hard hitting piece You hit me right where you were aiming
This is hard-hitting. "Eviscerated"! That was the perfect word to describe the emotions. Well done, Dana!
Oh crap, sir. This hits hard...deftly and wonderfully done for what it is...but yeah...a hard-edged one full of poignancy for sure. Real poignancy I might add. Oh and I've added your book to my list and will get in the next few days or so. And will reply to your lovely email v soon! Well done on this entry, sir!
Wow! Powerful stuff, Dana! Nice entry!
Heartbreaking!!!