The Moon- it looks, searching, spotting, seeing,
like a white beam in the night,
it looks down at me.
The Moon- it tries, searching, spotting, seeing,
like a yellow ball to replace the sun,
it looks down at you.
The Moon- it sighs, searching, spotting, seeing,
like a figure of light in the darkness of night,
it looks down at them.
The Moon- what does it do?
It searches,
It spots,
It sees.
The Moon- it repeats over and over again,
like a replacement to the bright of day,
it looks down at me.
The Moon- it smiles, searching, seeking, finding,
a face in the sky,
it looks down at us.
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If You Love Me, You'll Do It
I met Jason when I was five years old. I could say that I loved him from the moment I saw him. He was so handsome to me and I felt in awe by his presence. When they introduced him as the new kid in school, I wanted to be his friend right away. I remember it like it was yesterday. I remember his smile and how he didn't seem shy. He appeared confident and ready to learn. I waved at him and said "hello," before anyone else could even say a word. He sat next to me, and I asked him if he wanted to be friends. He looked so happy as he said, "Yes!"
By Sidney Smith (Sid Smith)7 days ago in Fiction
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Very beautiful poem, I love how the refrain of "searching/spotting/seeing" structures and holds up the poem. Refrain or repetition of lines is a great way to add form and musicality to a free-verse poem. And you are already experimenting with variation and development of your refrain. Excellent!