Saturated
(Lost for Words)
i tried to tell them
what i could see
(i was lost for words)
each time i tried
my explanations
withered with my breathe
(i was lost for words)
the more incoherent
i became
the more i could see
i was caught in a loop
of chemicals and pure wonder
but they were caught
in their own amusement
(i was lost for words)
i looked to this skies that night
i knew
i felt the sky that night
i felt so high; that sight
and even that felt right
that night
i could see
to become a part
of the this
and the that
i had to detach myself from it first
i let myself stay with the sky
as i came apart from it
i could hear
the winds of time
rush the sky through my mind
i could taste
then, now and the future
i was saturated
in bitter and sweet
i was saturated
in the everything of nothing
i was saturated
in blissful happy sadness
that uncurled deep inside
i was saturated
and enveloped
inside a miasmic spiral
a curling plume
of rushing joys
of viscous emotions
of semi tamed winds
i looked
i was shown
both facts and fictions
secrets and lies
the obvious
the mysteries
this thing we are in
it goes on forever
no beginning
no end
a wonderful invisible light
bends around us
bends around everything
everything is connected
we pulse in this pattern
we are saturated in connections
we pulse in this design
we are saturated in all directions
we are the pulses
we are that
that we cannot see
we know everything there is
we just have to find it
we just have to put
the pieces together
we are saturated in it
we are tales
untold
we are journeys
unmade
we are the discoveries
that are yet to be
and we will still thrill
these many jaded worlds
you just have to look
and not see
feel and let go
try and not be
it was then
and only then
that i found
where the gods
had hidden
the dragons
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Bren
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Compelling and original writing
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Heartfelt and relatable
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Comments (17)
Oooooo this is fabulous! You describe the feeling of dissolution perfectly. Only those who have been on that journey can walk beside your words as you go through it
Feels like a journey or quest even. Excellent piece.
Nice
You must be an amazing human to know in real life; just sitting back re-reading this and feeling my own pulse. Phew!
Marvelous work! Keep it going—congrats!
This feels like part 1! Like the opening of an epic poem, soon to be continued in an inn near you. Just, gorgeous. I think the first third or so is my favorite part. The clever misuse of language is particularly striking to me, but the following section really captured the essence. "i had to detach myself from it first i let myself stay with the sky as i came apart from it i could hear the winds of time rush the sky through my mind i could taste then, now and the future i was saturated" Ohhh, there's so much here, so much spirituality and philosophy too. It's unbearably surreal, like it's tugging at some part of me. Like the dragons being hidden away is a truth some of us are attuned to, and crave finding, like the narrator does here. This could be in a high fantasy novel. Utterly beautiful.
Wow. I read it as it was performance poetry and dang it sounded GREAT!
This was ethereal for me. It felt relatable and yet untouchable in the elegance of your word choices and the way you let the piece unravel itself! I could see this being a wonderful opening page to a book about dragons!! Great work Brenton!
Noice! It’s unusual! Love the projection of this Brenton..didn’t know where I was heading but enjoyed!! 😁
I loved the expressive surrealness of this so much, Brenton! When you said this, "in blissful happy sadness...that uncurled deep inside" the dragon came alive to me in my mind. Awesome job!
Beautifully written!!! Congratulations on Top Story!!!❤️❤️
Wow! This is beautiful
I have been in this space and you described it absolutely perfectly. Beautiful and powerful piece, Brenton! Well done!
Very powerful beautiful poem!
Whoaaaaa, what a wild ride! So intense!
I just have one question. Can I have some? 😁
That's quite a journey.