Romeo & Juliet
My sonnetized version of the classic tale...
I loved you from the first I saw your eyes –
I knew the plans my parents made were wrong.
‘Twas you my heart would long for – our demise
Was set in stone by feuds fought way too long.
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We ran away in secret to be wed –
Our life of married bliss begun with gore.
Our final chance was this, the friar said
But even that was not to end the war.
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Sublime - the song you sang to me in rhyme,
Your rhythm set the beating of my heart.
Our love had reached its pinnacle, its prime
Forever now immortalized in art.
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“For never was a story of more woe –
Than this of Juliet and Romeo.” {Romeo and Juliet, V.iii.308-9}
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Krysha Thayer
Welcome to my little corner of Vocal! I've been a copywriter for many years after earning my BA in English and Creative Writing. I'm now back to the fun stuff, enjoing short fiction and poetry. You can find me on Facebook!
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Comments (16)
I love your rendition of the tragedy...so poetic and on point, congrats,
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This is easier to understand than the original, brilliant work, thankyou for sharing and congratulations on Top Story xx
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This sonnet is masterful and beautiful! It’s like Shakespeare himself wrote it. I read it in Judi Dench’s voice in my head.
Brilliant work Krysha!
Beautiful, Congratulations on Top Story! :)
Congratulations on your top story, Krysha.Your poem is beautiful!
What a heartfelt tribute to Romeo and Juliet! Congratulations on your Top Story!
Congratulations on your Top Story.
And back to say congrats!!
Congrats on the Top Story! Brilliant retelling of the story in so few lines.
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Beautiful take on the story, the sonnet is one of my favourite poetic forms
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Beautifully written. Such a heartfelt nod to Romeo and Juliet.