Retreat
An entry for the Moment of Silence Acrostic Challenge
By Rachel DeemingPublished about a year ago • 1 min read
Photo by Birmingham Museums Trust on Unsplash
Sadness comes when silence descends and
I do not want it here to spread its
Liquid quiet into spaces where insecurity lingers;
Ekeing out dormant thoughts which cannot make
Noise when they have no air. But when they emerge as
Chaotic busyness retreats, I crave the return of the
External, as a storming battalion, to shut out the sound of myself.
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This was an original take on the idea of silence Rachel, as most of the ones I’ve read around thoughts have had silence as calming and positive. “as a storming battalion”- so visual.
Breathtaking Rachel!!! 💚
Love the retreat into silence!!!❤️❤️💕
The “liquid quiet” line was such a gem!! Another great acrostic!
Wow! “ Liquid quiet into spaces where insecurity lingers; Ekeing out dormant thoughts which cannot make”……love those lines so much. Well done…well done.
So relatable, well done Rachel. Good luck 😁
Wanting to shut out the sound of myself is certainly relatable. Love this. Oh, and I just accidently unsubsidized, but I'm coming back. Can't get rid of me that easily. 😁
Ooff, that was powerful. That alter voice in your head can be really destructive and demeaning.
Sometimes the mind is unforgivably loud and noxious. I loved this poem, Rachel, especially the final line. I hear the echoes in it of “troubles come not single spy but in battalions” from Hamlet.
Another strong entry from you pally! This is great. Like others have said, "Liquid quiet" is such an evocative phrasing, love it a lot. That last line too, hits hard really.
Interesting take on the challenge… I especially like: “ But when they emerge as Chaotic busyness retreats, ‘ ✅
I so empathize with the last line...silence of self, so deafening. I really like the emotions here.
Oooo, liquid quiet, I especially loved that!
Great job at capturing inner fears...loved "liquid quiet into spaces"
There is an industriousness to avoiding our own depths, isn't there.