Your smile as soft as a tulip's petals
(The shade of my blushing cheeks)
Your quiet voice as breathtaking as
Raindrops colliding with shelter
My heart - reaching like Icarus towards the sun
My eyes - always on you, memorising your every feature
Us - a shifting of tectonic plates
About the Creator
Poppy
poetry in progress
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Eye opening
Niche topic & fresh perspectives
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Standing While Falling
Quotation from Friedrich Nietzsche "He who wrestles long with monsters should beware lest he himself become a monster. And if you gaze long into an abyss, the abyss also gazes into you. Man is not destroyed by suffering, but by the meaning he makes of it."
By LUCCIAN LAYTH6 days ago in Critique
Comments (13)
Sweet melody!
Your quiet voice as breathtaking as raindrops colliding with shelter. Nicely Done!!
Absolutely outstanding. Artwork with words in pink. ⚡💙⚡
This feels like spring love. Soft, warm, and inviting! Beautiful poem!
A love poem indeed. Aw - Tulip petals, they are so soft. Your quiet voice as breath taking as raindrops colliding with shelter. Absolutely beautiful.
Love the rhythm and dynamic feel of those final hyphenated lines! Beautiful poem, Poppy!
This contains a subtle depth and beauty that touches inside. Great job. 🤗
Beautiful lines, but with the Icarus and tectonic lines, I fear it cannot last. Well done
This is so delicate yet powerful—like nature itself. That last line? Absolutely stunning. Love the mix of softness and unstoppable force!
Excellent poem 💖… I like its progression from soft & gentle to earth shattering 😳.
Those last three lines were my favourite. Loved your poem!
so lovely, Poppy
And so the earth moves, Poppy.