Quench
An Entry for the Sensational II Challenge
By Rachel DeemingPublished about a year ago โข 1 min read
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Sprinkle me with something sweet, coat me in its soothing salve;
Tap my drum with tranquil beat, let liquid music tempt the valve;
Show me colour, show me blue, show me magic, show me true;
Take me up to smell the clouds, render them jagged, into two;
Quench my thirst for fullness of life with droplets of the densest delight.
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This is an alliterative and rhyming treat of a poem! Feels like I just indulged!
Oooo, I wanna smell the clouds too hehehehe. Loved your poem!
Your first and last lines are just so good.
Lovely....and a bit sultry....
I agree with DJ as well, I hear the chant and even plea suggests elements of magic. And then of course is the metaphor that this is really more than a request for sensual delights but rather something much more lasting. Very well done, Rachel!
Live that sweet life, Rachel! loved it
This felt sultry to me... was it intended that way?? ๐ Loved all the sensory elements of this, Rachel!!
Ah...quite...sensual...on the quiet. Dunno if that's what you were going for, but it kinda came through. Loved it, chum! exquisite rhyming (from the guy that hates rhyming lol.) and wonderful word choice. I like what DJ said. Feels apt.
Lovely rhythm and rhyme ๐
This reads like an ancient spell, masquerading as a nursery rhyme. Deftly done!
Oh, I really like the flow of this one. It's like a song. Well done, my friend.
Fantastic! I love the clever rhyme to this one, Rachel!
This is truly sensual, Rachel.